ImmortaLily Rise

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G E Beyers and J W Collins

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Lily is an immortal child born to fulfil a prophecy, but she doesn't know it. Her uncles death takes her to new Orleans where a supernatural world is revealed to her. She has to choose between destiny or freewill. Living or dying. What will she choose?


Fantasy,Young Adult

Short Summary

Lily, an unemotional child, grows up protected from constant danger by her uncle and his team of wolfling. She is totally unaware of the supernatural side of her life, until her uncle dies, and she finds herself fleeing to New Orleans where the truth is revealed and her emotions begin to unfold.


Blackheath, England and New Orleans, USA ( Travelling through new York and Chicago)

Based on a True Story


Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Twist,Other

Mature Audience Themes


Main Character Details

Name: Lily Du Plessis

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Badass,Complex,Heroic,Modest,Selfless,Romantic,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Alex Monsanto

Age: 21

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Heartthrob,Villainous,Blunt,Manipulative,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf,Secretive,Sexy,Adventurous

Additional Character Details

Name: Tallis Summers

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Role: logical

Key Traits: Decisive,Empathetic,Faithful,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Obedient,Selfless,Secretive,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Charlotte Rittal

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Confident,Desperate,Greedy,Insecure,Narcisstic,Sexy,Blunt,Outspoken,Sarcastic,Seductive,Unapologetic

About The Author

AUTHOR BIO Jak Collins was born in Perth, Western Australia in 1992. Married to his soul mate and best friend. He has one incredible, beautiful little girl called Emerson. He is highly creative, and runs a successful Perth based photography business – JWC.IMAGE - where he gets to shoot some of the most beautiful models in WA, on some of the most pristine beaches in the world. He spent two years at The acting corps in Los Angeles, and he is also the Co-Author of the YA urban fantasy – Immortal hearts trilogy. In his spare time, he Likes to ride his motorcycle, go free diving, hang out with photography associates and friends, and enjoy family life. AUTHOR BIO Georgia Beyers was born in London, England, and has been living in Australia since 1989. Married with three grown up children, three grandchildren, six foster children, and a dog called Charlie bear. She loves books, chocolate and cats. She hates sharks, cottage cheese and the cold. Georgia writes both middle grade books, and young adult books. In her spare time, she enjoys reading, travelling, spending time with her family, especially her children and grandchildren, and writing about herself in third person - Haha.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+,13-17

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Linellen Press

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available



ISBN–13: 978-1-922343-58-1




Lily has lived a sheltered life but when she finds her cranky uncle dead in his study, she flees to a trusted friend. He left her a note and it takes her into a world of creatures: vampires, witches and werewolves. Lily is actually an immortal child who might fulfill a prophesy. The last immortal was locked up and now is searching for Lily, but she must stand and defeat him.

Overall Rating


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Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story begins with the mysterious sheltering of Lily. She hasn't been allowed to do much alone as if her uncle is hiding her from the world. His death plunges Lily world she didn't know existed. The plot is teased at as are some of the twist that are revealed.

Possible Drawbacks

The writing is cliché, using many predictable phrases. Much of the plot is predictable and has a distinct young adult novel tone. The story needs a more sophisticated language. The romantic relationships between some of the characters is off putting because of the age differences. Lily is 17 dating Tallis who is in his 20's. He could be 18 as well so that the acceptance of the relationship by others does not seem unrealistic.

Use of Special Effects


Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Lily was sheltered her whole life because she is an immortal born from a witch and a vampire. She can fulfill a prophesy creating a new species of creatures but many want her powers for there own game. I would watch this movie for the world of vampires, witches and werewolves and the unique ideology this story creates around them. There is also magic.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase but there have been many young adult fantasy stories brought to the big screen. It might not draw the attention of audiences as it might have before Harry Potter or Twilight.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. There is nothing exceptional about the storytelling, the plot or the characters. It is a solid story that is entertaining.

Envisioned Budget


Similar Films/TV Series


What’s New About the Story

The story is original because of the unique ideology it is creating for a world filled with vampires, witches and werewolves. Also the prohpecy surrounding Lily is unique to the story. The storyline of a chosen person who is the only one to fulfill a prophesy is a popular storyline in the fantasy genre.

Lead Characters

The lead character is a teenage girl with all the feelings and thoughts of a typical teenager. While her circumstances change she doesn't have a distinct character arc. The story focuses on world building.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem. It is a solid story that has interesting elements. It needs editing to make the stakes higher. There is too much time spent on Lily building relationships and having adventure for a film. The plot gets lost at moments,The story is original because of the unique ideology it is creating for a world filled with vampires, witches and werewolves. Also the prohpecy surrounding Lily is unique to the story. The storyline of a chosen person who is the only one to fulfill a prophesy is a popular storyline in the fantasy genre.

Possible Formats

TV Series: Network, Cable, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation



While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The tone of the story should be more serious. Lily is an immortal and must face another immortal who wants to take over the world. The time spent on her having fun in New Orleans or making friends at school could be condensed. While it can be touched upon, too much time spent on her having a life detracts time from seeing her grow her powers, learn about her new world and to get an understanding of the villain, Fabian. That can be reserved for a sequel where her world and the audience understanding of her life is broadened.