Friendship, Honor, and Murder
Logline
Three young boys swear to an oath of friendship and honor; years later, one of them breaks the oath -- now someone must die.
Genre
Crime,Detective,Drama,Mystery,Suspense/Thriller
Short Summary
A Brooklyn detective investigates a series of mob killings and suspects one of his childhood friends is the killer.
The detective solves the crimes, but he lets the killer go. The killer goes back to his home in Wilmington and finds his old girl and they marry.
Setting
Wilmington, DE, and Brooklyn, NY
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Tragedy
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Nicky Fusco
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Badass,Modest,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Honorable,Leader
Additional Character Details
Name: Frankie Donovan
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Masculine,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Honorable,Leader
Additional Character Details
Name: Tony Sannullo
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Masculine,Aggressive,Narcisstic,Villainous,Complex,Power Hungry,Criminal
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Development Pitch
NICKY FUSCO drives to Nino Tortella’s house and waits. Nino walks in, and is beaten with a bat and murdered. To confuse the medical examiner., Nicky sprinkles DNA evidence from multiple people before leaving. Detective FRANKIE DONOVAN investigates and finds evidence pointing to people from his old neighborhood, and that’s his worst nightmare. Years ago, Frankie, Nicky, and TONY grew up together as youngsters in an Italian neighborhood: stealing cigarettes, working for wise guys, and taking an oath of friendship & honor. Nicky says if anyone breaks that oath, they’ll die. Nicky falls in love with ANGELA at the age of fifteen, but then he gets involved in a gang fight. He shoots a rival who kills his friend, Tommy. Nicky is arrested and sent to prison. Ten years later, Nicky is released from prison and goes to see Tony, now a mobster in N.Y. Tony introduces Nicky to TITO, an organized crime boss. Nicky tells Tito he will do anything as long as he can make money to get Angela back. Tito tells Nicky he wants him to become a hitman’s apprentice. Nicky accepts and kills three men who owe Tito money. Tony suggests Tito use Nicky to take care of a woman (GINA) who is blackmailing Tito, because he knows that Nicky will probably say no. Secretly, Tony knows that sooner or later, Nicky will find out that Tony raped Angela, and he wants to get rid of Nicky before that happens. Nicky agrees to kill Gina, but he can’t go through with it; instead, he helps her escape. Gina is shot
Genre
ACTION, SUSPENSE, ROMANCE, DRAMA
Brief
Frankie, Nicky, and Tony grew up together as youngsters in an Italian neighborhood. Nicky gets arrested and, when he is out, he looks for his old pal Tony, who gets him back into crime. For Nicky it may seem like Tony is helping him, but his intention is to get rid of Nicky before he finds out about his wrongdoings.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: GOOD
Premise: GOOD
Structure: GOOD
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Book profile is excellent.
Draw of Story
The hook of this story is certainly Nicky, the protagonist, and it is clear from the start. Lines are also impactful and well written, which keeps the script reading interesting and is crucial to this type of narrative. The first scene is also violent enough to grab audience’s attention from the start.
Possible Drawbacks
Nothing made me want to put the script down, however violence can get pretty graphic at times.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
I would watch this movie as it has potential to become an interesting update to gangster narratives, with the ambiguity of romanticism and violence; naivety and betrayal, sometimes even in the same character. Its protagonist, Nicky, gathers those elements and becomes interesting along with the dubious ethic code he lives by as this sort of soft-hearted criminal.
Fanbase Potential
It could have a large fanbase if adapted in case other characters, apart from protagonist, are better developed – especially Tony – in order to create even more relatability with audience. More hints to sustain his behavior may be provided – maybe early age jealousy of Nicky. More understanding about his behavior could lead to a deeper engagement.
Awards Potential
It could have awards potential because it offers upgrades on a style that is well-known to Hollywood and great results could be achieved both in innovative art direction as in references to old style movies. Lines are also sharp and well-written, and good actors would certainly benefit from this and take this narrative to the next level.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
SCARFACE, THE IRISH, GODFATHER.
What’s New About the Story
The original thing about this story is mostly concentrated on the construction of the protagonist Nicky. Also, lines are great; more character development could be done in order to make them even more unique.
Lead Characters
The friendship bond between the three boys and the betrayals involved as time passes are what drive this narrative; but the most interesting thing about it is how Nicky follows this dubious code of ethics, unlike Tony, but in the end they are all dangerous criminals with murders on their backs.
Uniqueness of Story
It could be improved in terms of character development, especially regarding side characters. What makes Nicky and Tony stand out in terms of becoming iconic characters is a question worth asking.
Possible Formats
Film/Television
Analyst Recommendation
CONSIDER
Justification
Consider it because the material is interesting, however it would need to be sharpened in order to get the attention of investors in terms of character development and lines.