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Howie Weiner howieweiner01@gmail.com 5240489050266



Howie Weiner

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Paola Verdad killed her husband, and got off easy. Trial was a three ring, social media sensation. She served an anger management sentence aboard a therapy cruise, playing her beloved harp. DA Amy Shoutzen vowed revenge, and saw her opportunity pretty damn quick.



Short Summary

In Paola's search for the lunatic hit and run driver that destroyed her home, she joins forces with smitten road vigilante, Arthur Stram. They find the culprit, Lola Joy, not only dead, but find out she is the sister of top crime boss, Ray Daisy. Who killed Lola Joy?


Los Angeles

Based on a True Story


Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest

Plot - Other Elements


Mature Audience Themes


Main Character Details

Name: Paola Verdad

Age: 30

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Funny,Outspoken,Aspiring

Additional Character Details

Name: Arthur L. Stram

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Outspoken,Underdog,Adventurous

Additional Character Details

Name: Rabbi Jackson Jackson Brown

Age: 68

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Religious,Complex

Additional Character Details

Name: Amy Shoutzen

Age: 49

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Power Hungry

About The Author

Howie Weiner is the author of the screwball noir comedy novel, Unclogged. As a SAG-AFTRA actor you've seen him in hundreds of shows if you have a pause button. He has performed and written stand-up, and sketch comedy all across this great land. Oh, and he is a certified hypnotherapist. BFA Creative Writing and Literature, Emerson College.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

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Publishing Details

Status: No

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A cast of characters is trying to determine who killed Paola's husband. There are many suspects and new developments change the perspective on who did it. Some wind up dead and Covid-19 prevents justice from being enacted completely.

Overall Rating


Point of View


Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story did not draw me in. It is difficult to comprehend the story because of the writing. The writing was reminiscent of an old 30's newspaper man or detective style dialogue which I'm not sure was the intention considering it is set in modern day.

Possible Drawbacks

The writing style made it very difficult to understand the story. The sentences structure were not complete and mimicked erratic inner dialogue. At times, it was not formatter correctly to explain who was speaking. The story needs to be formatted traditionally as a novel for better comprehension of the story.

Use of Special Effects


Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Paola is trying to clear her name but many around her want to see her brought to justice. The question still is if she did it. I would watch it for the multiple storylines that intertwine with varying events that make the audience wonder what the truth is.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase. The dialogue is erratic and the story is not formatted into complete sentences which make it difficult to follow the plot. The story jumps around between storylines and characters without much flow.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. As is, it is hard to decipher the plot and story with the way it is presented.

Envisioned Budget


Similar Films/TV Series


What’s New About the Story

The story is not original. It is a murder mystery story that has a decent ending. There could be more diversity and more care needs to be taken in making the language of the story deliver the plot effectively. The story needs to have more descriptive paragraphs that create the world and better dialogue to give clearer distinctions to the characters.

Lead Characters

The lead character, Paola, stands out as a strong female character. She is accused of killing her husband, but it doesn't scare her. She takes action, trying to discover who is framing her.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem. It is an entertaining crime drama that needs to be made clearer. As is, the audience has to look past many faults to understand the plot.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation



While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The story needs to be formatted correctly with clear and descriptive sentences that work together to tell the story. There is a styling to the current version which add characteristics to the story but take away from it's basic purpose in telling the story effectively.