Factor 6

John Robert

Book Cover

GENRE

ACTION ADVENTURE HORROR SCI-FI WAR SUSPENSE/THRILLER OTHER MYSTERY

    Core Theme

    PERSEVERANCE

    TIME PERIOD

    Future

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    STAR WARS, STAR TREK, ALIEN

    CHARACTER LIST

    MIRANDA FISHER (F/30S) -- GROUNDED, DUTIFUL SPACESHIP PILOT.

    CHADWICK JONES (M/30S) -- SURE-OF-HIMSELF, LOYAL JOKESTER, PILOT, AND ALLY OF MIRANDA.

    ROB CLAIBORNE (M/30S) -- COCKY-AS-CAN-BE HOTSHOT PILOT WHO JOINS MIRANDA’S SQUAD.

    MAYA (F/20S) -- STUNNING, COMPASSIONATE EMPRESS OF EDEN WHO DEFECTS TO THE AMERICANS.

    KALLAN (M/XX) -- AGELESS, CALLOUS, TYRANNOUS EMPEROR OF EDEN.

    DENIS MCFEE (M/30S) -- BROODING, TO-HIMSELF PILOT AND CLOSE ALLY OF MIRANDA.

    Logline

    Factor 1: Panic and War, Factor 2: Housing, Factor 3: Food and Water, Factor 4: Resource Management, Factor 5: Off-Planet Expansion, Factor 6: CLASSIFIED. For Lt. Miranda Fisher, finding humanity's next habitable planet is nothing short of a nightmare.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54

    Target Gender: Female Leaning,Universal

    Setting

    Space, star charting, testing planets for compatible habitats, a near-Earth twin

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Self-published / Amazon

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    For Lt. Miranda Fisher, finding humanity's next habitable planet is nothing short of a nightmare. Relying on her squadron and administration stationed aboard the USS Scorpius, life support systems with a two-year shelf life, her patience, endurance and mental health are constantly tested.

    Ending Description

    After dealing with multiple threats, both human (all humans are from Earth, some left prior to the core group of characters) infected species and the shadowy 'Merchants' which (spoiler) traded human cadavers for technology advancements, now Captain Fisher pursues and unknown ship, becoming lost.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    978-1-7360667-2-0

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity,Nudity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist,Other

    Plot - Premise

    Voyage and Return,Quest,Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth

    Main Character Details

    Name: Lieutenant Miranda Fisher

    Age: 32

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Sexy,Honorable,Leader,Faithful,Engaging,Decisive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Lieutenant Robert Claiborne

    Age: 38

    Gender: Male

    Role: Sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Narcisstic,Charming,Skillful,Outspoken,Blunt,Decisive,Confident,Lone Wolf,Unapologetic,Educated,Heartthrob,Engaging

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Queen Maya

    Age: 25

    Gender: Female

    Role: tempter

    Key Traits: Charming,Clumsy,Sexy,Skillful,Visionary,Romantic,Secretive,Seductive,Manipulative,Naive,Gracious,Faithful,Engaging,Empathetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Admiral Ted Wilson

    Age: 55

    Gender: Male

    Role: mentor

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Confident,Obedient,Skillful,Honorable,Educated,Leader,Engaging,Flexible,Secretive,Heroic,Modest,Patriotic

    Genre

    FANTASY, ACTION, THRILLER, MATURE AUDIENCE, WAR

    Brief

    Humanity, including the deft pilot Miranda Fisher and team, traverses deep space in hopes of finding a new home planet. They encounter terrifying, parasitic beasts before receiving a strange signal from another foreign planet. They investigate the signal and come in contact with a society of human-like people that have settled on the tropical planet, Eden. After diplomatic talks fizzle, the American forces decide to invade Eden, after taking out several observation towers vital to the planet's defenses. Eventually, they succeed in taking control of the planet, and Miranda is awarded the rank of captain of her own ship.

    Overall Rating

    GOOD

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    It is a fair reflection. There is a concern, though, with the target audience being listed as "Female Leaning." This work is overwhelming written with the male gaze, and its success seems contingent on looping in fans of existing sci-fi fandoms that are exceedingly male-dominated.

    Draw of Story

    The author's writing style strikes as simple, efficient, and accessible, which is important given the plethora of somewhat complex sci-fi concepts. It makes this work feel enjoyable and easy to read, and it contrasts effectively with the graphic sexual, gore, and violent elements that come.

    Possible Drawbacks

    While it's entirely impressive that the author kills his darlings every 150 pages or so, this work does seem to lack a strong enough character focus in Miranda. We seem to invest largely in Miranda over the course of the text, but she is often times sidelined from the action while we meet and follow new or less dimensional characters. We then default to her for the lulls and connective tissue between set-pieces, which feels odd. Also, there are 100 or 200 pages in the middle third of this text that feel light on action and drama despite feeling heavy on dialogue and plot. Perhaps there is room to cut, condense, and simplify some of the deliberations and set-ups as we transition into the invasion of Eden.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is that this work is a sure-handed genre entry in the pantheon of epic Sci-Fi. Fans of Star Wars, Star Trek, and the Alien series will get exactly what they pay for-- There is no shortage of action, excitement, gore, and even sexual intrigue, with an abundance of creature thrills and the promise of dazzling VFX.

    Fanbase Potential

    This could perhaps have a large fanbase-- It seems intended to tap into the already existing fandoms, and it has a mash-up quality to it that would bode well for it casting a wide net. There is something for almost everybody in this work, especially within the confines of the Sci-Fi genre.

    Awards Potential

    No, this is not an awards-type project. Sci-Fi of this ilk has never fared well in awards season outside of the Saturn Awards and make-up and VFX categories.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    STAR WARS, STAR TREK, ALIEN SERIES

    What’s New About the Story

    Although certainly well-written and action-packed, as far as concept and originality are concerned, this work does leave something to be desired. The first 100 pages feel like a riff on the Alien series, the middle segment of this work feels like it borrows much from Star Trek for its exploration, military, and diplomatic elements, and the final third-or-so feels somewhat derivative of the original Star Wars trilogy for the content of its action and creature excitement. Although the author takes the very interesting approach of more-or-less tying the three elements together in the end, there seems to be opportunity to further differentiate this work from what has come before.

    Lead Characters

    Miranda stands out for her groundedness and her pain. She is an astute pilot and contributor to the Americans' cause, and she carries with her the baggage of several lost friends and loved ones. It's not often that we see a character get punished, emotionally, as much as Miranda. It makes her sympathetic and complex.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This is not a rare gem, per se, as it doesn't bring all that much that feels subversive or new to the table. It certainly has room to deviate and subvert what has come before, especially within the traditions of Star Wars and Star Trek. Be that as it may, this work is still largely effective and memorable for its high-stakes, character consequences, and visceral action.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    CONSIDER

    Justification

    This work is worth a 'Consider' designation for how action-packed and exciting it is-- As noted, there is no shortage of creature thrills, space combat, and exploration elements. The stakes are constantly high, and the consequences for the characters are aplenty, giving this work a special emotional resonance as a result.

    Brief

    Having fled from a dying sun, humanity has taken to space in gargantuan arcs in search of a new habitable planet to call home. Soon, Lt. Miranda Fisher and her squadron of space pilots must battle ferocious creatures and help execute the invasion of a tropical planet governed by a callous emperor.

    What We Liked

    This work was appealing for its visceral action and thrilling sci-fi elements-- Fans of Star Wars will be pleased with the aerial battles and creature thrills, fans of Star Trek will be enticed by the exploration, diplomatic, and escapism elements, and fans of darker genre entries like Alien will be enthralled by the horrifying creatures contained in these pages. The epic stakes are almost unmatched in this epic, often relentless, saga.

    Film: This would be a solid candidate for adaptation to film in that it follows in the tradition of endlessly proven concepts-- People might flock to this work for the escapism and excitement it affords-- No shortage of popcorn thrills and entertainment to galvanize a wide audience.

    TV: This would make for a solid adaptation for TV for its wide array of characters-- The longer format would yield plenty of time to flesh out the ensemble, to capture the work's many intricacies, and to take advantage of endless other opportunities. This work is almost Game of Thrones-esque for how the author kills his darlings, too.

    Key points:
    1. The creature thrills and horror elements.
    2. The fact that the author kills off main characters for maximum impact.
    3. The consistently high stakes.
    4. The indelible imagery and locations.
    5. The undeniable franchise potential.

    Synopsis

    Having fled from a dying sun, humanity has taken to space in several gargantuan arcs in search of a new habitable planet to call home. Among them is MIRANDA FISHER, an astute spaceship pilot, and her close ally and fellow pilot CHADWICK JONES. She and her squadron are tasked with investigating a potential new planet to call home, but they find themselves attacked by a lethal, parasitic, alien foe, and they end up having to destroy a science vessel that gets overrun by the creatures.

    Soon, Miranda and co. are tasked with investigating a signal sent from another alien planet. On it, a cocky pilot, ROB CLAIBORNE, is shot down and taken prisoner by the formidable EMPEROR KALLAN. Eventually, Miranda and her team rescue the captured pilot, but CHAD is killed in action. EMPRESS MAYA, Kallan's wife, defects with the humans. Soon, a food scarcity and contamination problem leaves humanity with mere days until mass starvation. The American leaders consult with Maya over an imminent invasion on her planet, Eden.

    An assault on Eden ensues, with forces usurping a vital observation tower in an arctic region with the help of the steadfast trooper JOHN CLYDE. They proceed to a subsequent target, but they find themselves swarmed by bloodthirsty animals in a treacherous swamp environment. Rob is devoured by a centipede monster. Many are killed, but an onslaught is put into action after attempts at diplomacy fail. The Americans successfully take control of Eden after discovering that Kallan has killed himself. For her constant aerial support, Miranda is awarded the rank of captain of her own ship, and she assists in remedying a food supply with an invaluable Edenian herb. However, when pursuing a rogue vessel in space, Miranda finds her ship lost...

    About The Author

    A first responder since 2005, John writes fiction to decompress from the physical and psychological demands of his day job. His fascination with aeronautics, aviation, and outer space leads him to write about pilots and epic aerial and deep space adventures. John currently lives in New Hampshire.