This is How Rich People Eat

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DRAMA ROMANCE YOUNG ADULT

1980s & '90s,2000s

Jonathan Buyck

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Submision Type

book

Logline

Coming of age. Childhood friends struggle with difference in social status. Girl has crush on boy but struggles with her own issues involving epilepsy and dyslexia while boys family is not nearly as well off as hers. This boy (Dan) reflects on his time with her growing up which includes a tragedy.

Genre

Drama,Romance,Young Adult

Short Summary

Opening with early 90's coming of age scenes. Kids playing Pogs and other games. Introduction into girl (Autumn) "easier" childhood. Introduction into Daniels unstructured childhood. Plot point when Autumn has seizure and also is bitter toward her struggle with dyslexia

Setting

Lawrence Massachusetts

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Daniel

Age: ten but also as adult in therapists office

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Empathetic,Underdog

Additional Character Details

Name: Autumn

Age: ten-ish

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Insecure,Funny

Additional Character Details

Name: Dr. Benning

Age: 50's

Gender: Female

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Skillful

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

About The Author

Born on April !4 1984 in Methuen Massachusetts and grew up in Lawrence Massachusetts. Jonathan Buyck written two short story collections titled Bad Karma Book one and two which are very Black Mirror and Twilight Zone esque This is How Rich People Eat is a stand alone coming of age.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

B09FSJX287

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

Daniel and Autumn support each other despite their different backgrounds. Daniel's family is resentful of Autumn parents who are landlords. Autumn suffers from epilepsy and she dies at a young age Daniel reflects on his friendship with Autumn in therapy as an adult.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The logline and short summary are reflective of the story. The development pitch could be further developed to explore themes unique to the story rather than compare to other films and vague descriptions that it is an emotional story as the tragedy description of a childhood death already addresses this without needing to directly mention the sadness.

Draw of Story

The idea that money can buy security but it can't by health or family is a good theme. It balances the two characters who each have what the other lacks in terms of a loving home and normal health markers but financial instability or material security but health problems and loneliness.

Possible Drawbacks

The narrative is rather short to gain insight about the messages behind the themes presented. Creating slower pacing that allows for greater transformation of the inner conflicts of the two children protagonist could more clearly illustrate the themes.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Autumn is a young child who has everything Daniel wants in life but she dies from epilepsy.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a potentially larger fanbase as it is family friendly, but the characters would need further development as this feels more like enough story for a short rather than a feature or television series.

Awards Potential

This is unlikely to have awards potential unless the themes are more developed and further dimension are added to the children to create more dynamic protagonists rather than reactive characters to the situations at hand.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

MY GIRL, BRIDGE TO TERABITHIA, STATE OF GRACE (TV SERIES), WONDER YEARS, WHERE THE WILD THINGS ARE

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the dynamic of the children and their relatable problems which could be expanded by minimizing the frame story of Daniel's adult reflections which do not really advance the plot in most instances.

Lead Characters

Daniel is protective, curious and reactive. Autumn is open, playful and hopeful.

Uniqueness of Story

This has some potential with more plot and character development to enhance the premise along with some structural adjustments.

Possible Formats

Film: Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Focusing more on the childhood dynamic and less on the adult reflections could better demonstrate further theme development. Adding more character development will increase emotional attachment and therefore even out the pacing with continuous tension building towards the climax.