Storm Dreamer, The Crossing Trilogy, Book 3

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ACTION ADVENTURE CRIME DRAMA SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE MYSTERY

2000s

June V. Bourgo

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Submision Type

book

Logline

24-year-old Madie Hayes life spirals out of control when nightmares of a frightened young woman haunt her. Can she solve the mystery of her dreams or will she fall victim to something she's yet to understand?

Genre

Action,Adventure,Crime,Drama,Suspense/Thriller,Romance,Mystery

Short Summary

Working at the Stoney Creek Wildlife Rehabilitation Centre, Madie believes her life is on track; a dream job, great bosses, co-workers, and maybe even love. Her life begins to spiral out of control when the nightmares she suffered as a child return during thunderstorms--and it's the rainy season.

Setting

Okanagan area of the southern interior of British Columbia

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Quest,Tragedy,Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Twist,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Madie Hayes

Age: Twenty-three

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Badass,Heroic,Leader,Sexy,Outspoken,Romantic,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Cody Diaz

Age: 26

Gender: Male

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Masculine,Charming,Sexy,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Flexible,Heartthrob,Educated,Leader,Romantic,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: Chelsea Grey

Age: 42

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Engaging,Gracious,Heroic,Leader,Skillful,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: Douglas Crawford

Age: Late 40s

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Criminal,Villainous,Narcisstic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Unapologetic

About The Author

Biography June V. Bourgo was born and educated in Montreal, Quebec. She and her artist/writer husband, Dennis live on Vancouver Island. The island sits off the western coast of British Columbia. Between them, they have three adult children and nine grandchildren. June's writing is inspired by the natural beauty of the landscape and the Salish Sea that surround her home. Her writing began with magazine articles for a single-parenting magazine, and writing historical copy. Her love of novel writing grew from there. As a Next Chapter Publishing Author, her debut novel, Winter's Captive, Book 1 of The Georgia Series is inspired loosely by her survival and lessons learned from an abusive relationship. Chasing Georgia is Book 2 of the Georgia Series and Missing Thread, Book 3 of this series continues the journey of Georgia Charles This is a suspense/thriller family saga that inspires forgiveness, redemption, and women's empowerment with a touch of Magical Realism. Magnolia Tree, Book 1 of The Crossing Trilogy was released in 2018, and Chameleon Games, Book 2 was released in July 2019. Book 3 was released In August 2021. Book 1 encompasses the disappearance of a mother and the search by her daughter to solve the mystery and continues throughout the trilogy with the aftermath of her search and how it affects various characters. Again, the author's writing style follows a suspense/thriller adventure with a touch of the Supernatural. Currently, the author is working on a new book, Beyond Impact.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Next Chapter Publishing

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

979-8464853980

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA, SUSPENSE

Brief

Madie begins having dreams again that haunted her childhood. It turns out her dreams are memories coming to the surface. Melanie is a reincarnated murder victim and must get closer the answers of her tragic fate in order to find peace.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The profile is pretty reflective of the story. The logline is a bit too long and may be better suited for the short summary. The mention that Madie works at the centre is not needed twice as it is not as relevant to the story although it does add depth to her character. Cody is also listed as a protagonist when he is more of a main character and Madie is the only protagonist. Given that Chelsea has more chapters from her third person POV she is more of a secondary protagonist than Cody. The pitch does a good job establishing the themes of the story that are marketable.

Draw of Story

Madie's history and dreams mixing together is a compelling concept with a surprising direction in that she has to solve her own murder while being a different person. It is both complicated and ultimately simplified in a satisfying manner.

Possible Drawbacks

There are different viewpoints in different chapters which can delay the pacing of Madie's main conflict. For example, Chelsea's relationship with Chaz is not really relevant at such length with Madie finding her past. Focusing more on Madie could help keep the momentum consistent or at least shortening other exposition scenes not related to her might also be a solution.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Madie has to find her own killer after memories start popping up of her past life. It is similar to a ghost solving their own mystery but a fresher concept where the protagonist is able to be more proactive.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a decent sized fanbase for those that are a fan of psychological thrillers involving romantic relationships. It is unlikely to be a blockbuster but could fare well with women.

Awards Potential

Given its genre this is unlikely to have much awards sway but there is a slight chance this could do okay commercially.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE GIRL ON THE TRAIN, DARK PLACES, REBECCA, SECRET IN THEIR EYES, UNFORGETTABLE, THE LUCKY ONE

What’s New About the Story

The story's originality stems from the premise that Madie is a reincarnated murder victim. Focusing more on Madie solving her own case and less on interpersonal relationships could help keep the tension building.

Lead Characters

Madie is curious, determined and sometimes immature. Cody is supportive, playful and strong. Chelsea is mindful and supportive.

Uniqueness of Story

This has some neat elements and character details such as geriatric pregnancy, but the length of the subplot scene lengths can distract from the main conflict. Many of the side characters are static.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Shortening scenes with more purposeful dialogue with nuance about plot development rather than character dynamic development could help make the pacing feel quicker as the momentum would build more consistently. Giving the side characters inner conflicts would also help increase emotional investment in their involvement within the main conflict. Focusing more on Madie solving the case could also help make the pacing feel more driven.