THE NINTH PROTOCOL

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ACTION MYSTERY SCI-FI ROMANCE SUSPENSE/THRILLER

Future

Kevin J Simington

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Submision Type

book

Logline

A high-tech thriller about a man with no memory who must run for his life, barely staying ahead of those who seek to kill him, while simultaneously trying to unravel the mystery of his missing memory.

Genre

Action,Mystery,Sci-fi,Romance,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Daniel Newman wakes up in hospital to find that he has no memory of anything before that moment. Unsatisfied with the explanations he is given, he begins to suspect that he is the victim of an illicit experiment, one that could alter the nature of humanity forever - if it doesn't kill him first!

Setting

North and South America in the 24th century.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Daniel Newman

Age: 32

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Complex,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Funny,Romantic,Sarcastic,Modest

Additional Character Details

Name: Kelly Rearson

Age: 32

Gender: Female

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Sexy,Funny,Selfless,Romantic,Sarcastic

Additional Character Details

Name: Dr Nigel Blakely

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Criminal,Greedy,Educated,Leader,Manipulative,Secretive,Skillful,Power Hungry,Complex,Villainous

Additional Character Details

Name: Carlos

Age: 38

Gender: Male

Role: tempter

Key Traits: Complex,Confident,Criminal,Empathetic,Engaging,Secretive,Unapologetic,Skillful,Blunt

About The Author

Kevin J Simington is an acclaimed fiction and non-fiction author whose books are renowned for their intelligence, clarity and wit. He is a very popular conference speaker on the topics of philosophy, apologetics and science. He also writes for several international magazines.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self-published

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

979-8776318207

Genre

ACTION, SUSPENSE

Brief

In the 24th century, Daniel wakes up in a hospital with no memories of him and why he is there. The medical team makes him believe that the corporation for which Daniel works was attacked and that he suffered severe injuries, which caused him to lose his memories and have an artificial heart. Over time, he suspects that he is being tricked and ends up discovering that he is part of an experiment done on humans. He then needs to escape and stay alive, getting help from some people for that and having as a solution to flee to another planet and start his life over.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

It is accurate.

Draw of Story

The story catches us right away. This man with no memory who struggles to discover the truth about his story while being deceived by an unscrupulous corporation makes us empathize with the protagonist and want to accompany him.

Possible Drawbacks

Despite having good twists and exciting action scenes, the story basically focuses on a single plot, which ends up making the book a little repetitive, but it is something that can be easily solved in the adaptation.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The book has enough appeal to hook in two ways: First, for the drama of this man who is being deceived and who has lost his memories, and also for the action scenes that the book proposes. This combination ends up being quite positive and appealing.

Fanbase Potential

The story has enough appeal to catch action and science fiction fans and still draws attention from a more general audience because of the protagonist's drama.

Awards Potential

The story has plenty of room for award potential: First, for the interesting visuals that take place in the distant future and the personal drama of the central character.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

STRANGER THINGS: DESPITE THE TONE AND STYLE BEING COMPLETELY DIFFERENT FROM THOSE PROPOSED BY THE BOOK, STRANGER THINGS ALSO BRINGS THE DRAMA OF A CHARACTER WHO WAS KEPT IN A LABORATORY AND WHO, ALONG WITH FRIENDS, WILL DISCOVER ABOUT THE EVIL CORPORATION AND TRY TO KEEP ALIVE. ROBOCOP: BECAUSE THE PROTAGONIST IS A MAN RECONSTRUCTED IN THE LAB BY A COMPANY THAT HAS DARK GOALS ABOUT IT.

What’s New About the Story

The fact that it takes place in the 24th century, allowing countless creative possibilities, and that the solution is to send the protagonist to another planet in order to keep him away from jail. The story could focus a little more on drama and less on action to make it more memorable.

Lead Characters

Daniel is a sarcastic, witty, and quite a smart protagonist. He finds out very quickly that he is being deceived and doesn't think twice about doing great crazy things to stay alive. The other characters work as support for the protagonist to reach his goal, and end up being less developed.

Uniqueness of Story

It's quite entertaining and has a good structure that takes the story forward without leaving too many loose ends, but it's not a rare gem because it's similar to many previous films with a similar theme. It would be interesting to explore more of Daniel's personal drama and the fact that he lost his memory.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

Despite having a well-structured plot, and combining science fiction / action / drama well, the story ends up looking a little generic compared to others we've seen. The unfolding of the narrative, which would focus on a second act, is still quite similar to other films and their action scenes.

Tips for Improvement

As the film takes place in the 24th century, there is an expectation created on top of that, of knowing how advanced technology would be at that time. However, we receive something that could pass for an advanced, but still recent, future. For example, Daniel gets absolutely incredulous when he learns he has an artificial heart. It seems like a reaction someone in the present or near future would have, but not someone who lives 300 years from now. Good opportunities are lost to create an even more original and creative plot visually and narratively speaking. Would people in the 24th century talk and behave remarkably like they do today? Would they make jokes that could be made today? Evidently, because it wants to attract a current audience, the film cannot be too far from our rules and reality, but it is worth reflecting on the subject anyway. The excess of explanations in dialogue is also tiring. There are indeed many rules and information that the audience needs to know to understand the story, but due to the excess of description and explanation, there is no space for the audience's thoughts. Everything is explained extensively, even in situations where excessive dialogue does not make sense. Like, for example, when Carlos turns out to be a traitor. The man is eager to capture Daniel and holds a gun pointed at him, but instead of finishing what he was doing, he spends a lot of time explaining to his own "victim" who he is, why he is there, how he operated, how he hid his identity. It takes all the tension out of the scene and makes it unbelievable. Making use of dialogue more consciously and thinking about what information is really relevant would be very effective for the plot.