A Cowboy In Essex

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FUNNY DRAMA ROMANCE

Contemporary

Lesley Jones

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Submision Type

book

Logline

Two strangers become trapped in a Colorado cabin in the middle of a snowstorm. Gracie is a feisty Essex girl, just flown in from London to nurse her broken heart. Koa is a twice-divorced grumpy mountain man.

Genre

Funny,Drama,Romance

Short Summary

Gracie, an English fashion blogger, arrives at the Colorado cabin she's booked for the next 6 months, in the middle of a snowstorm . . . Problem is, Koa, the owner, has moved back in and has no idea about Gracie's arrival. Both think the other, have broken in.

Setting

Colorado.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Rebellion Against 'The One'

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity

Main Character Details

Name: Gracie

Age: 30's

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Funny,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Koa

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Sexy,Seductive

Additional Character Details

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Additional Character Details

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About The Author

Lesley Jones was born and raised in Essex, England but moved to Australia in 2006 with her family. Her first book, Saviour, was published in 2013 and she quickly gained a reputation as a writer of gritty, down to earth characters, involved in angsty and emotional plot lines. Carnage, her third novel, made a number of lists, and won a number of awards for ‘Best Ugly Cry’. Her readers love the fact that she can switch her stories from hot and steamy, to snot bubble ugly crying, followed by laugh out loud moments, in the space of a few sentences. She has declared that the very best part of her job is meeting her readers and has travelled the world a number of times over the past few years to do exactly that. Lesley is a big fan of wearing pyjamas at any time of day, but not a fan of wearing a bra, unless absolutely necessary. When not writing, she has admitted to being a prolific reader, getting through around four or five books a week. She is a fan of trashy reality TV, listening to music, watching her son play football, spicy food and enjoys a glass of wine… or three.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon

Year Published: 2017

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

B0761XHXDD

Genre

COMEDY, ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

British Gracie breaks up with her fiance and escapes to a remote cabin in Colorado. To her surprise, the owner is unaware of her stay. Forced together due to a snowstorm, their bond becomes something neither of them planned. Koa, the owner ad country music superstar, tries to stop falling in love after telling himself no more relationships.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: EXCELLENT

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes the profile does reflect the story although the logline implies the conflict rather than make's the narrative's conflict clear. The development pitch discusses different genre tropes present within the book, but it could show its individual marketing strengths by adding focus to the themes.

Draw of Story

Forcing the characters together in a remote cabin where each are the other's intruder and then making them stay together during a snowstorm is an compelling dynamic.

Possible Drawbacks

The character's conflict remains almost entirely centered around their romantic relationships. For the characters to stand alone it might be helpful to add further depth to their inner conflict transformation separate from their romance.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that two single strangers are forced together in a snowed-in cabin and are complete opposites both in outlooks and upbringing so there is natural conflict to arise.

Fanbase Potential

This could potentially have a large fanbase either as a Christmas movie or a romance.

Awards Potential

This is unlikely to have awards potential for prestige awards but if there is a circuit for movies similar to Hallmark and Lifetime brands this story would be a strong competitor.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE HOLIDAY, LAST CHRISTMAS, FOREVER MY GIRL, FALLING INN LOVE, HOLIDAY IN THE WILD

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the situation of their lives being forced to live together, and making hte characters have conflict that is resolved outside of just romantic issues would help make their relationship seem more meant to be.

Lead Characters

Gracie is a sassy, protective and creative woman. Koa is a thoughtful, rugged and loyal guy.

Uniqueness of Story

This has some potential although the pacing can be a bit long which draws out the conflict and the themes are not apparent.

Possible Formats

Film: Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Showing how Gracie and Koa belong together outside of just changing their mind, creates a stronger foundation for their romance to feel earned with overcoming inner conflict flaws and external conflicts. For example, Koa just decides he is in love with Gracie and that she can have his child so they get a happy ending, but there's no background about why Gracie likes Koa outside his looks, how she can live in Colorado for six months as a British designer on vacation and where her life went from England after choosing to start a family in America. Quickening the pacing and introducing external subplots that enhance the main plot will also help make side characters feel more dynamic.