ACTION, WAR, POLITICS

Ben and his team scramble to struggle to find out who they can trust in their Air Force after a plane goes missing. The team must race to stop four attacks by this hidden spy ring. The spy ring in question is a group of Iranian radicals who posed as Americans for decades in order to gain high security clearance to accomplish their destructive plans.

FAIR

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

The profile mostly reflects the narrative, although the development pitch reiterates the logline and short summary, so might benefit by adding which themes the story upholds in order to add new information to the section about what makes the plot marketable. The character details could also be filled out in order to differentiate between the different books in the series.

The beginning of the plane going missing and the reveal that the pilot is secretly a spy for the Iranian radicals opens up a can of worms about who can be trusted in the US Army.

There is a large cast of characters that can be hard to keep track of especially in the structure of a mystery of not knowing who to trust. Creating more distinction between man characters versus side characters will help streamline subplots and character importance.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that Iranian radicals have been posing as Americans for years in order to pull off the security clearance needed to bring the US to its knees after the US interfered with Middle Eastern politics and Iran's leadership in the past.

Depending on the continued character development of the main characters, medium of adaptation and thematic refinement, the story could indeed have a larger audience for an action film about spies due to its refreshing concept and setting.

As an action film, it is unlikely to gain as much recognition in the awards circuit for prestige pieces, however there could be some potential depending on the development of the main characters, especially the protagonist.

LARGE BUDGET

THE AMERICANS, TINKER TAILOR SOLDIER SPY, TOP GUN, RED QUEEN, ZERO DARK THIRTY

The originality stems from the complicated relationship that the US created with Iran creating tension and the premise. While the concept of everyday spies in not new, it is original in that the sabotage occurs in an action setting rather than political manipulation.

Brad is confident, capable and a natural leader. Melanie is smart and efficient. Barak is calculative and deceitful.

This has a ton of potential with more refined character development and clarifying the themes of the narrative.

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

In refining the characters motivation there will be clearer reasons behind the goals and more emotional investment in their outcome. The themes of the story will also be strengthened in following the messages of the individual players in the revolution and their failed coup,