Dark Rain

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1960s & '70s

Dana Duthie

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Iranian backed terrorists strike four targets in the US and abroad, and a nuclear loaded F-16 Fighting Falcon is stolen off alert in Europe. A Navy Seal team and the story’s hero infiltrate Libya to retrieve the aircraft and bomb, while the US Air Force and Navy mount a large scale air attack on an



Short Summary

The Iranian Revolutionary Guard has planted “mole” families in American society and they conduct terrorist attacks on the US and its assets simultaneously in four locations. A “mole” pilot in the US Air Force steals an F-16 loaded with a nuclear bomb and flies it to Libya.


Washington D.C., Germany, Spain, Libya

Based on a True Story


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Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

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Main Character Details

Name: Brad Mitchell

Age: 45

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Confident,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Underdog,Skillful

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About The Author

Colonel Dana Duthie had a 24 year US Air Force career after graduating from the Virginia Military Institute in 1968. He had assignments as a flight school instructor after his own pilot training, followed by a tour as a Forward Air Controller in Southeast Asia, flying the OV-10 in combat. After that, he was posted in Germany flying the F-4 Phantom, and South Carolina, Korea and Germany flying the F-16 Fighting Falcon. He also had staff duty at the Tactical Air Command headquarters, the USAF Europe headquarters, and the Pentagon. Although the action in “Dark Rain” is fiction, much of the story reflects Colonel Duthie’s actual experiences, especially while stationed in Germany. Dana retired from the Air Force in 1992. He currently lives in Broomfield and Steamboat Springs, Colorado with his wife of 51 years. Two children and three grandchildren are nearby. A fourth grandson is in the Navy stationed on a nuclear aircraft carrier in the Pacific.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Male Leaning

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Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Matchstick Literary

Year Published: 2020

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Ben and his team scramble to struggle to find out who they can trust in their Air Force after a plane goes missing. The team must race to stop four attacks by this hidden spy ring. The spy ring in question is a group of Iranian radicals who posed as Americans for decades in order to gain high security clearance to accomplish their destructive plans.

Overall Rating


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Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The profile mostly reflects the narrative, although the development pitch reiterates the logline and short summary, so might benefit by adding which themes the story upholds in order to add new information to the section about what makes the plot marketable. The character details could also be filled out in order to differentiate between the different books in the series.

Draw of Story

The beginning of the plane going missing and the reveal that the pilot is secretly a spy for the Iranian radicals opens up a can of worms about who can be trusted in the US Army.

Possible Drawbacks

There is a large cast of characters that can be hard to keep track of especially in the structure of a mystery of not knowing who to trust. Creating more distinction between man characters versus side characters will help streamline subplots and character importance.

Use of Special Effects


Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Iranian radicals have been posing as Americans for years in order to pull off the security clearance needed to bring the US to its knees after the US interfered with Middle Eastern politics and Iran's leadership in the past.

Fanbase Potential

Depending on the continued character development of the main characters, medium of adaptation and thematic refinement, the story could indeed have a larger audience for an action film about spies due to its refreshing concept and setting.

Awards Potential

As an action film, it is unlikely to gain as much recognition in the awards circuit for prestige pieces, however there could be some potential depending on the development of the main characters, especially the protagonist.

Envisioned Budget


Similar Films/TV Series


What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the complicated relationship that the US created with Iran creating tension and the premise. While the concept of everyday spies in not new, it is original in that the sabotage occurs in an action setting rather than political manipulation.

Lead Characters

Brad is confident, capable and a natural leader. Melanie is smart and efficient. Barak is calculative and deceitful.

Uniqueness of Story

This has a ton of potential with more refined character development and clarifying the themes of the narrative.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation



While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

In refining the characters motivation there will be clearer reasons behind the goals and more emotional investment in their outcome. The themes of the story will also be strengthened in following the messages of the individual players in the revolution and their failed coup,