Valkyrie's Kiss

Book Cover

ACTION ADVENTURE SUSPENSE/THRILLER POLITICAL

Contemporary

Michael J Alcorn

  • -
  • Views

Submision Type

book

Logline

One year after narrowly escaping death at the hands of a shadowy organization's assassins, Billy Devereaux and Ally Blanchard use those insights to stop a larger attack by that same organization. But being a hero has a price-- one that's hard to pay when the next attack is only hours away ....

Genre

Action,Adventure,Suspense/Thriller,Political

Short Summary

A team of assassins enters a crowded mall during the Holidays and rains bullets into a food court, then, minutes later, detonates a car bomb in a hotel parking structure, and prepares to shoot bullets into a departing NFL football crowd.This is 1 of 5 such attacks, but the only one that gets stopped

Setting

Denver; Amarillo, TX

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Billy Devereaux

Age: 30s

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Faithful,Funny,Sarcastic,Heroic,Honorable

Additional Character Details

Name: Ally Blanchard

Age: 30s

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Blunt,Decisive,Selfless,Faithful,Honorable,Leader

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

About The Author

Michael's latest incarnation as a thriller writer is borne of too many hours spent dwelling in his daydreams/nightmares about the world his 3 children are growing up in. Having novels chosen as semi- and -finalists in competitions has confirmed that he either has captured the moment, or is borderline insane. Previous incarnations include martial artist, teacher, and professional musician.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Me (through Amazon KDP)

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER

Brief

Billy and Ally, being a prime skilled intelligence team, are able to stop part of a large scale attack of thousands of innocent people. The struggle to get to the bottom of the organization behind the cause of the attacks as the closer they get the more they are in danger. Billy and Ally want to protect the population but need to protect each other just as much as they'd be lost without each other.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: FAIR

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Indeed the profile does reflect the narrative although additional characters could be added to the details such as the antagonists in the guild. The pitch is well done explaining the heart and theme of the story rather than just an in depth plot.

Draw of Story

The opening attack has a lot of tension and there is a ton of emotional investment in Billy and Ally's friendship.

Possible Drawbacks

The dialogue can focus more on character development rather than concrete purpose or expositions which can create scenes that could be trimmed but in excess can slow the pacing by elongating gaps between plot progression. Trimming some scenes is a quick fix to shorten the gap and make sure the dialogue remains purposeful.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is the friendship and dynamic of Billy and Ally as they navigate the assassins. It is refreshing to see how they support one another in a platonic manner but one that goes beyond professional boundaries.

Fanbase Potential

This could potentially have a large fanbase as a series due to the charming protagonist dynamic and its action genre.

Awards Potential

Due to its action genre this is unlikely to have awards potential despite the terrorism themes that have potential to garner notice.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

HOMELAND, 24, LAW AND ORDER: ORGANIZED CRIME, JACK RYAN, ALIAS

What’s New About the Story

Again the unique aspects of the story are not the thematic developments of the assassin's themes but the themes within the friendship o Billy and Ally.

Lead Characters

Ally is conspiratorial, supportive and brave. Billy is responsible, adventurous and protective.

Uniqueness of Story

There's a lot of good elements to the terror plot especially a strong opening, but the violence can become overdone and the scene length can also create dips in pacing where neither instance really progresses the plot.

Possible Formats

TV Series: Streaming, Cable, Network

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Trimming scene length to less dialogue about character development at times could help quicken the pacing a bit. The themes of terrorism and cyber attacks are somewhat fresh but choosing more hopeful outlets rather than senseless violence may be more marketable to clarify the antagonist's motivation.