Ian and Anton

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ROMANCE HISTORICAL FICTION RELIGIOUS DRAMA FAMILY

2000s

Robert Beckstedt

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Submision Type

Book

Logline

In 2004, during the height of the HIV/AIDS epidemic in South Africa, Ian Roberts becomes associated with a budding megachurch. As part of their building campaign, they include funds to build an AIDS Hospice in a Black Township. One Sunday, Ian returns home and impulsively sends an email volunteering to help the church in SA start a business which would create jobs and fund the operations of the Hospice. Being an entrepreneur and world traveler, his philosophy of acceptance to people of all religions comes under attack by the clergy of his new megachurch. Pastor Anton Nikosi and Ian Roberts form a symbiotic relationship, teaching all involved in the Post-Apartheid environment the meaning of love and respect. And for Ian Roberts, he gains a practical understanding and a deepened faith in God.

Genre

Romance, Historical Fiction, Religious, Drama, Family

Short Summary

In 2004, during the HIV/AIDS crisis, a White American and a Black South African Pastor form a symbiotic and deep friendship and develop a holistic approach to help treat and prevent the epidemic during the Post-Apartheid reconstruction years of South Africa.

Setting

Charlotte NC/South Africa

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Philosophical Questions, Coming of Age, Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Ian Roberts

Age: 54

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous, Charming, Confident, Leader, Faithful, Aggressive, Modest, Romantic, Perseverance, Selfless, Underdog, Educated

Additional Character Details

Name: Anton Nkosi

Age: 45

Gender: 45

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming, Leader, Narcissistic, Religious, Aggressive, Blunt, Educated, Manipulative, Naive, Outspoken, Power-hungry, Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Esther Nkosi

Age: 45

Gender: Female

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Charming, Confident, Faithful, Gracious, Leader, Religious, Strong Moral Code, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Modest, Visionary

Additional Character Details

Name: Jordan West

Age: 32

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming, Leader, Narcissistic, Religious, Aggressive, Blunt, Educated, Manipulative, Naive, Outspoken, Power-hungry, Unapologetic

About The Author

Robert Beckstedt has traveled the world, exposed to many cultures. Beginning in 2004, he spent seven years in South Africa, living and working in a Black township helping a pastor develop an holistic approach for the prevention and treatment of the HIV/AIDS epidemic.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Year Published: 2024

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

9798870118550

Genre

DRAMA, RELIGION

Brief

Ian is called to attend church after the events of 9/11 where he is inspired to go to South Africa. The rise of HIV/AIDS cases compels Ian to plan to open a Hospice building in South Africa. Ian works with Anton, a pastor in South Africa over many years to help those afflicted by the disease. Ian has many obstacles but becomes very successful in his business and beloved by the people he meets in South Africa.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The story reads is biographical of Ian’s time in South Africa. While it is based on the author’s real experience in South Africa, the story doesn’t have a driving plot. There are many emotional, heartwarming moments but the writing style does not convey it in a meaningful way.

Draw of Story

The story drew me in because of the connection to 9/11. America is shaken by the events and many people have flocked to church, seeking answers and comfort.

Possible Drawbacks

The writing style and dialogue are very rudimentary. There is a lack of characterization for any of the characters. Everyone is very one dimensional. All of the characters are Chrisitian and the dialogue is heavy with Christian ideology which doesn’t allow for character development. The faith of the characters can be shown without oversaturating the dialogue.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Ian is brought back to the Christian faith after 9/11 which leads to his desire to help those afflicted by HIV/AIDS in South Africa. He sets out on a mission and gains enrichment in his experiences. I would not watch this movie because it has a white-savior troupe. Ian is a white man who travels to Africa to help the locals. It’s essentially missionary work and it is glorified in this story. A story with this theme might not work at this time because of a wider understanding of colonization through religion that took place in Africa.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase. It is a faith-based story and could find some popularity among Christian audiences. Currently, it does not have many elements that would appeal to a mass audience.

Awards Potential

There is a lack of characterization, an undefined plot and unimaginative dialogue that would evade any awards potential. The story is not inspiring or exceptional as is. If it broadened its lens to look at the state of South Africa, how they arrived at this moment in time and show the perspective of South Africans and their struggle, the story would have more impact.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

DANGEROUS MINDS, LEFT BEHIND

What’s New About the Story

The story is not original. There are many stories of white people with means, traveling to poor places in the world to “help”. Ian does seem genuine but the story of Christian missionary work in places like Africa has lots of negative repercussions. There is a new public understanding of the deep scars Africa has because of colonization and this story reinforces many of those destructive ideologies.

Lead Characters

Ian doesn’t stand out as a character. He is very one dimensional. There is hardly any character development besides him being a Christian man trying to live a Christian life. Ian is reduced to one characterization.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem. It is a mundane story with unexceptional dialogue and no character development. To improve this story, the dialogue needs to be more sophisticated and reflect the age and education of the characters. Ian and Anton are one dimensional with the audience not acquiring an emotional connection to the characters. The audience never learns who they are.

Possible Formats

TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

This is a work in progress because the story is not conveying the emotional message it could be considering the seriousness of the story. The world Ian steps into in South Africa is not explored. South Africa is rich with culture and history with vibrant and complex people. None of that is shown, everything is surface level. The audience is not immersed in the world. The story doesn’t feel concise. The book feels like a series of short stories instead of a continuous story.

Tips for Improvement

This story needs to be elevated in all areas: more character development and world building. The plot needs to be focused. Why does the audience care about Ian, Anton and their efforts? Why do the people of South Africa love Ian so much? The audience never finds out. The story needs a clear voice. The dialogue needs to be cultivated to express that the characters are educated, adults who have emotions and thoughts.