DRAMA, ROMANCE

Russell is a great father, husband, and beloved leader in his motorcycle club, but he has an explosive temper that makes people afraid. Jesse loves her husband but ends up wondering whether staying with such an explosive man is the best for her and her son Levi. Russell is sent to jail for his decisions, and when he is released, he realizes what really matters to him and decides to change his life.

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THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

The author didn't fill the profile. It's empty.

It is a love story between two common people, who go on together despite the adversities of life. This desire to keep the marriage is introduced from the beginning, making us empathize with both Jesse and Russell.

Some scenes and dialogues are too long, with so many details and people talking about the same subject repeatedly, which makes their impact lost.

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Russell's personality, this exemplary man at home but troublesome on the streets, and the way his wife Jesse handles it. This counterpoint between his persona at home and the one who gets into trouble is interesting. Jesse lives several internal conflicts because of this duality coming from her husband.

The troubled marriage story could attract a wider audience and is the hook of the book. However, after a while, Russell's problems with his brother and his motorcycle club end up gaining more attention, but at the same time, they are not so impactful.

There are internal conflicts, and the theme is visible, present, and relevant, but the drama seems to get lost a little in the heart of the book when we stop following this couple's internal dramas to see scenes of confrontation and pure action. Focusing on the issue of marriage and internal conflicts arising from family and relationships could give the narrative greater potential for awards.

MEDIUM BUDGET

WILD HOGS: A GROUP OF MOTORCYCLE FRIENDS WHO LIVE ADVENTURES AND NEED TO FACE THEIR RIVALS. TIME (DOC): HOW A WOMAN REACTS AND DEALS WITH HER HUSBAND'S ARREST.

The story is not much original. What might be considered a little unique is that Russell has an almost dual personality.

Jesse is an interesting character. She's an excellent mother and wife, and she does everything she can to keep her marriage, but she finds herself questioning whether staying with her troubled husband is the best solution. It seems like a genuine dilemma. Russell, having this dual personality, could be a very complex character. However, his arc and development could be improved.

It's not a rare gem. The narrative structure and events of the story could be improved to generate more emotion, more feelings in the audience.

Film: Indie, Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

First of all, the sequence of events could be improved. The events are believable and make sense in chronological order. However, these events don't make us feel too much emotion or immerse us fully in the story. We are thrown away from this family when reading the plot, not closer to it, as expected. If Russell were more empathetic, more complex as a character, perhaps we would have an impetus to stay by his side. However, despite the love of his son and his wife, he quickly loses his temper and makes mistakes, even though he knows it would hurt his wife. The wife gets annoyed with her husband's attitude but goes by his side, forgiving him day after day. It's a realistic approach to many love relationships worldwide, but it's a kind of relationship that is frustrating to watch on screen. We hope that both go through increasingly higher and different conflicts. However, repetition in attitudes makes the narrative lose strength, and we get somewhat bored. Levi is a good character who brings innocence to this adult story and relief to pages and pages of discussion, confrontation, violence. Russell's father figure is also interesting because he is also a source of internal and external conflict for the protagonist. The dilemmas regarding the relationship with the father are intriguing. The relationship between siblings is also very troubled and generates numerous conflicts for Russell. He sees himself as responsible for his brother and ends up suffering the consequences for it. In the end, it is a story about relationships and how these relationships generate conflicts in everyday life, how people deal with these relationships. So, if this is the basis, it would be interesting to see a more dramatic narrative in this sense than actually a series of arguments and fights and action scenes.