WHITE AS THE WAVES: A STORY OF MOBY DICK
Submision Type
book
Logline
A retelling of Herman Melville's classic "Moby Dick" using the viewpoint of the title character, "White as the Waves" explores the life of the fabled white whale, from his birth off the Galapagos Islands to his fateful encounter with the man who would become his greatest nemesis.
Genre
Action,Adventure,Epic,Drama
Short Summary
The white whale of Herman Melville’s novel is depicted as attacking whaling ships and their crews, not from malice but to avenge the killing of his mate. When he sees a young female bottlenose dolphin fleeing from a shark, he kills the predator, and the dolphin becomes his loyal companion.
Setting
Pacific Ocean
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Whitewave
Age: 70
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Desperate,Empathetic,Heroic,Strong Moral Code,Complex
Additional Character Details
Name: Feliki
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Role: Sidekick
Key Traits: Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Charming,Outspoken,Funny
Additional Character Details
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Genre
ACTION, DRAMA, FANTASY
Brief
The origin story of Ahab’s White Whale in Moby Dick. The story is told from the perspective of Whitewave aka Moby Dick following their birth until their encounter and revenge for humanities attack on whales. Pursued by the Pequod, Whitewave vows to protect the other animals in the ocean from the greedy teeth of men aka their hunting and whaling tools.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
It is accurate.
Draw of Story
The research and expose about the foreign underwater world of sperm whales and fascinating and well-done.
Possible Drawbacks
However in initially tying the book to the classic Moby Dick, the span of the plot is perhaps too long to keep a consistent tension thus even pacing throughout the story.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that Moby Dick is remixed to tell the story from Moby Dick rather than the boat crew to explain the interspecies quarrel.
Fanbase Potential
If either freed of the Moby Dick connection or refined to revolve more around Moby Dick the story would have a clearer direction and appeal to either a smaller literature crowd or be a popular action film.
Awards Potential
This is unlikely to have awards potential unless animated for a kids story or for technical achievements if decided to be live action.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
IN THE HEART OF THE SEA, MOBY DICK, MOBY DICK, HAPPY FEET, KEDI
What’s New About the Story
The unique aspects stem from showing the hidden inner worlds of sperm whales so either shifting entirely to new themes revolving around whale survival with a smaller scope or focusing more on just the connection to the Herman Melville story will help make the goal of the plot clearer.
Lead Characters
Whitewave is curious, adaptive and protective. His mother is cautious, wise and caring. Nickfin is selfless, brave and inspiring.
Uniqueness of Story
This definitely has exceptional imagination however the scope is somewhat too large to form meaningful emotional attachment to the whales as it is unclear why they think and act like humans when they are not.
Possible Formats
Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
The scope of the conflict is too large which creates uneven pacing and unclear themes. The characters feel static when constructed around human archetypes rather than three-dimensional whales.
Tips for Improvement
Condensing the time frame would help establish themes that are easier to follow and help keep pacing more even. Allowing the whales more freedom to act less human could also help separate the story from Moby Dick or connect it more closely.