Finding Moksha: One Woman's Path in Uncertain Times

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DRAMA

2000s

Amanda L. Mottorn

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Submision Type

book

Logline

Eva seeks to find stability from the relationships in her family into her adult life through the choices she makes starting from her teenage years into adulthood. She reaches a breaking point and commits to a trip that may change her life. Eva takes back her power from abuse by healing through yoga.

Genre

Drama

Short Summary

The story starts with Eva's family life from her teenage years and illustrates the impact an alcoholic parent has on Eva. The story opens showing the impact of the emotional abandonment she experiences, the secrets she kept and how it impacts her as an adult.

Setting

Costa Rica, Pittsburgh area and surrounding Laurel Highlands, Rocky Mountains of Colorado

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Sexual Abuse, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Eva Edwards

Age: teenager to 30s

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Secretive,Insecure,Desperate,Complex,Obedient,Lone Wolf,Educated,Skillful,Aspiring

Additional Character Details

Name: Gwen

Age: 30s

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Aspiring,Outspoken,Educated,Empathetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Michelle

Age: 30s

Gender: Female

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Decisive,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Visionary

Additional Character Details

Name: James

Age: 40s

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Flexible,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Selfless,Outspoken,Visionary

About The Author

Finding Moksha: One Woman's Path in Uncertain Times (2021) is Amanda L. Mottorn's first novel. Her career started as a librarian working with academics and vendors alike. She later worked in academic sales across the United States selling access to online databases of archived content. She enjoys reading, being in nature, traveling and making connections around the world. Her passion is helping people find and speak their creative voices. She incorporates that while building creative communities such as through Internations' groups in Hanoi, London, New York, Dubai, Milan, and others.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

yoga practitioners, trauma survivors, anyone who's experienced alcoholism in the family

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-7373076-0-0

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

A woman carries past traumas of having lived with an authoritarian and alcoholic father, a submissive and overprotective mother, and sexual abuse suffered by schoolmates. Having these traumas causes Eva to fall into unhealthy relationships until she is able to overcome her traumas through yoga and some other treatments.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

It is accurate.

Draw of Story

It starts with Eva's difficult childhood, which makes us empathize with her right away. We understand where her traumas regarding family and relationships were born. As a child, the person does not come to see everything clearly, but seeing from the outside, we understand how these traumas were injected into her.

Possible Drawbacks

The part where she goes to do yoga with her friends seems very repetitive. The clothes shopping, the dialogues about yoga, and the practices themselves have their narrative importance, but all of this takes on a lot of weight and time in the book.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is about overcoming traumas created in childhood and adolescence and knowing how these traumas are born and developed throughout life.

Fanbase Potential

Fans of drama with an ending full of hope and resilience might like the story. As it has a bit of romance it can also attract this audience, and the yoga environment can attract practitioners as well.

Awards Potential

If the path followed is more focused on overcoming childhood traumas and a new start in life, I believe it has potential. If the adaptation gets too focused on yoga or on how she managed to overcome her problems, I believe the potential diminishes slightly.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

BASTARD OUT OF CAROLINA: A GIRL IS ABUSED BY HER STEPFATHER, BUT HER MOTHER DOESN'T OBJECT FOR FEAR OF LOSING HER HUSBAND. PRECIOUS: A GIRL IS ABUSED BY HER FAMILY AS A CHILD AND ENDS UP GROWING UP WITH TRAUMAS THAT SHE WILL HAVE TO DEAL WITH.

What’s New About the Story

Yoga as one of the forms of healing is a bit original since the rest of the story we've already seen before.

Lead Characters

Eva is a girl who seeks freedom despite her insecurities. A girl who was able to see the family problems and sought to stay away from them. She is a protagonist who looks very realistic and fits in well with the story. Eva's parents play the role of that more traditional family full of problems, where everyone prefers to pretend that nothing is happening to maintain the image of a good family. It's a good representation.

Uniqueness of Story

It is an inspiring story about overcoming heavy traumas under the female universe, but it is not a rare gem. As the narrative is already well known by the public, perhaps a way to make it more attractive is designating a specific style to tell this story in particular, based on fleeting memories that are still so striking.

Possible Formats

Film: Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

As this is a story that has already been told a lot - of the child who feels rejected at home and is abused outside of it - the way in which the story is told would be a differential. The movie "The Tale" is a good example of how to tell a story like this from a new perspective. In The Tale's case, the woman carries subconscious traumas from her childhood, but does not remember the abuses themselves. Everything that she imagined as being her past begins to undo while the protagonist starts to remember what really happened, and the post-trauma made her forget. It's a narrative style that unfolds the story for both us and the character. So it would be fascinating to apply it to Eva's story and think about how it could be told to make it resemble less previous movies. Eva's character is very good, but the secondary characters end up getting less developed. Further development of secondary roles would help a lot to keep interactions more interesting and more profound. Too much dialogue can take away the experience of understanding feelings and sensations. As everything is so widely discussed, the opportunity to show these feelings in a more visual, more beautiful way is lost. It's a relevant story, with scenes that are very hard to watch, but it could be better developed in style, characters and, structure.