DRAMA

A woman carries past traumas of having lived with an authoritarian and alcoholic father, a submissive and overprotective mother, and sexual abuse suffered by schoolmates. Having these traumas causes Eva to fall into unhealthy relationships until she is able to overcome her traumas through yoga and some other treatments.

FAIR

FIRST PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

It is accurate.

It starts with Eva's difficult childhood, which makes us empathize with her right away. We understand where her traumas regarding family and relationships were born. As a child, the person does not come to see everything clearly, but seeing from the outside, we understand how these traumas were injected into her.

The part where she goes to do yoga with her friends seems very repetitive. The clothes shopping, the dialogues about yoga, and the practices themselves have their narrative importance, but all of this takes on a lot of weight and time in the book.

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is about overcoming traumas created in childhood and adolescence and knowing how these traumas are born and developed throughout life.

Fans of drama with an ending full of hope and resilience might like the story. As it has a bit of romance it can also attract this audience, and the yoga environment can attract practitioners as well.

If the path followed is more focused on overcoming childhood traumas and a new start in life, I believe it has potential. If the adaptation gets too focused on yoga or on how she managed to overcome her problems, I believe the potential diminishes slightly.

MEDIUM BUDGET

BASTARD OUT OF CAROLINA: A GIRL IS ABUSED BY HER STEPFATHER, BUT HER MOTHER DOESN'T OBJECT FOR FEAR OF LOSING HER HUSBAND. PRECIOUS: A GIRL IS ABUSED BY HER FAMILY AS A CHILD AND ENDS UP GROWING UP WITH TRAUMAS THAT SHE WILL HAVE TO DEAL WITH.

Yoga as one of the forms of healing is a bit original since the rest of the story we've already seen before.

Eva is a girl who seeks freedom despite her insecurities. A girl who was able to see the family problems and sought to stay away from them. She is a protagonist who looks very realistic and fits in well with the story. Eva's parents play the role of that more traditional family full of problems, where everyone prefers to pretend that nothing is happening to maintain the image of a good family. It's a good representation.

It is an inspiring story about overcoming heavy traumas under the female universe, but it is not a rare gem. As the narrative is already well known by the public, perhaps a way to make it more attractive is designating a specific style to tell this story in particular, based on fleeting memories that are still so striking.

Film: Indie, Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

As this is a story that has already been told a lot - of the child who feels rejected at home and is abused outside of it - the way in which the story is told would be a differential. The movie "The Tale" is a good example of how to tell a story like this from a new perspective. In The Tale's case, the woman carries subconscious traumas from her childhood, but does not remember the abuses themselves. Everything that she imagined as being her past begins to undo while the protagonist starts to remember what really happened, and the post-trauma made her forget. It's a narrative style that unfolds the story for both us and the character. So it would be fascinating to apply it to Eva's story and think about how it could be told to make it resemble less previous movies. Eva's character is very good, but the secondary characters end up getting less developed. Further development of secondary roles would help a lot to keep interactions more interesting and more profound. Too much dialogue can take away the experience of understanding feelings and sensations. As everything is so widely discussed, the opportunity to show these feelings in a more visual, more beautiful way is lost. It's a relevant story, with scenes that are very hard to watch, but it could be better developed in style, characters and, structure.