The Chronicles of Teng
GENRE
RELIGIOUS ACTION ADVENTURE FANTASY
Core Theme
ARE WE ALONE IN THE UNIVERSE?
TIME PERIOD
Contemporary
COMPARABLE TITLES
CLOSE ENCOUNTERS OF THE THIRD KIND, ET, CONTACT
CHARACTER LIST
• EDGAR BLAKE: 40S. LEAD. SMART AND CURIOUS.
• EDGAR BLAKE: 40S. LEAD. SMART AND CURIOUS.
• SUSAN: 30S. BLAKE'S LOVE INTEREST. INTELLIGENT AND CURIOUS.
• LEO: 40S. BLAKE AND SUSAN'S FRIEND. GRUMPY.
• MIGUEL: 125. AGELESS. THE LIAISON BETWEEN HUMANS AND VISITORS.
• CALGOR: 100+. THE WISE LEADER OF THE VISITORS.
• TENG: 150+. WISE, WITH TELEPATHIC POWERS, HE'S BLAKE'S GUIDE.
Logline
Edgar Blake finds evidence in Tibet of friendly Alien visitations dating back fourteen thousand years. They are to due to return soon. Beliefs and faiths are lost and found as he battles against Chinese, Russian and American agents to reveal all to the world. A cultural exchange takes place.
Target Audiences
Age: 18-34,35-54,55+
Target Gender: Universal
Setting
LHasa Tibet, California, New York
Based on a True Story
No
Publishing Details
Status: Yes: self-published
Publisher: self-published
Year Published: 2014
Starting Description
Archaeologist Edgar Blake and companions are lured into Chinese occupied Tibet. Deep into the mountains, they come across a cavern full of alien artifacts left on Earth by aliens fourteen thousand years ago, a precurser to their return. Chinese, Russian and American agents, want what they have found
Ending Description
Beings from another galaxy return to Earth after fourteen thousand years. A two year cultural exchange of personnel takes place, which sees Egdar Blake and his companions travelling to Velos 2.5 million light years away, in the Andromeda galaxy.
Group Specific
Information not completed
Hard Copy Available
No
ISBN
9781497336995
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Plot - Other Elements
Philosophical Questions, Happy Ending, Meaningful Message,Meaningful Message,Other,Happy Ending
Plot - Premise
Quest,Voyage and Return,Internal Journey/Rebirth
Main Character Details
Name: Edgar Blake
Age: 48
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous, Empathetic, Honorable, Selfless, Visionary, Confident, Educated, Masculine, Strong Moral Code,Empathetic,Selfless,Confident,Educated,Strong Moral Code,Visionary
Additional Character Details
Name: Leo Porter
Age: 48
Gender: Male
Role: Sidekick
Key Traits: Greedy, Sarcastic, Blunt, Clumsy, Educated,Sarcastic,Clumsy,Funny,Educated
Additional Character Details
Name: Susan Carter
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Aspiring, Empathetic, Romantic, Sexy, Confident, Gracious, Sophisticated, Adventurous, Beautiful, Complex, Engaging, Seductive, Selfless, Charming, Educated, Skillful,Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Sexy,Educated,Empathetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Teng
Age: 150
Gender: Male
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Lone Wolf, Strong Moral Code, Modest, Perseverance, Religious, Selfless, Visionary, Blunt, Empathetic, Engaging,Visionary,Empathetic,Selfless,Religious,Lone Wolf,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Complex
Genre
SUSPENSE, RELIGION, ACTION, DRAMA, ROMANCE
Brief
Blake, Susan and Leo go to Tibet to find the origin of a gold statue that was left on Blake's doorstep. They encounter Chinese and American spies who want to know what they're up to. They find a cave that shows them the history of Earth - from an alien race that was here 14,000 years ago. They make contact with the aliens who come back to Earth and exchange 100 of their citizens for 100 of Earth's.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: GOOD
Premise: GOOD
Structure: GOOD
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it does depict the book properly.
Draw of Story
Aliens, espionage and hidden knowledge.
Possible Drawbacks
Cliche dialogue. Punch up the dialogue using more natural and original sounding lines.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
Aliens, who have already been to earth and gave us advanced technologies long ago.
Fanbase Potential
Small. This concept has been done before. More originality is needed.
Awards Potential
No. This story has been written before.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
CLOSE ENCOUNTERS OF THE THIRD KIND, ET, CONTACT
What’s New About the Story
The Tibetan aspect is original. It would be more unique with characters who are underdogs and who have bigger challenges to overcome to reach their goals.
Lead Characters
They are experts in their fields.
Uniqueness of Story
Not a rare gem as it is. It would require quite an overhaul. Characters and dialogue are mostly cliches that we've seen already. A story with more conflict and bigger obstacles to overcome is necessary.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
The dialogue and characters are a bit cliche, and the story needs more conflict.
Tips for Improvement
Interesting underdogs for characters and obstacles for them to overcome.
Brief
Archaeologist Edgar Blake travels to Tibet. He discovers evidence that the hand of God has indeed been at work elsewhere in the universe. His quest, is to reveal all to an unsuspecting world, before the powers that be intervene.
What We Liked
- It has very attractive elements. There is adventure, danger, hidden knowledge - and aliens. We are taken on a quest with a compelling payoff. Answers to life's biggest questions await if our smart and capable characters can complete their journey.
- There is a lot in this story that lends itself to the big screen and good special effects - mostly the mountains and cities of Tibet and the alien technology. It is structured for a film in that there are three clear acts. This is a story that would look great on a big screen.
- Key points: Aliens; Advanced technology; Romance; Hidden treasures; Supernatural abilities
Synopsis
Riding in a Land Cruiser are Professor EDGAR BLAKE (40s, lean, long fair hair), linguist SUSAN CARTER (33, tall and pretty), and museum curator LEO PORTER. They are being driven across Tibet by TSU and WONG. Blake’s cohorts wonder what adventure they’re embarking upon - maybe it has to do with Blake’s controversial theory that there was a race of giants who thousands of years ago gave humans their advanced technologies before they disappeared. In their tent for the night, Blake shows them a letter on a strange metal resembling tin-foil. He rubs off the writing, and it reappears. He crumbles it up, and it smoothes itself out. He cuts it and it repairs itself. Its author is a Tibetan lama called Teng. He also produces a small gold statue that was left on his doorstep with the letter, leaving his companions in wonder. The Chinese allow them into Tibet or the ‘Chinese Tibetan Autonomous Region’.
Driving on the 900km Friendship Highway, they’re attacked by Chinese bandits, and after a prolonged fight they tie one of the bandits to the roof and take him to a truckstop. They hand him over to the police. They reach Lhasa, and reflect on the Chinese occupation of Tibet and how they tried to wipe Tibet and its culture off the map. They check into their hotel rooms and have dinner when two Chinese officials, CHEUNG and WONG, ask for their papers. The next morning at breakfast, Blake is knocked over by a boisterous German tourist. American travelers BRAD and DOUG sit at their table and say they have been their five weeks and write travel guides. Cheung and Wong interview the three separately in their rooms, and Susan is given an etching to translate - and notices that it’s similar to markings on Blake’s gold statue. They find out Brad and Doug lied and had only been there a short time. They visit the temple where the Dalai Lama lived and Blake has a weird sense of deja vu when he thinks a door should be in one of the walls. He has a vision of the Dalai Lama drinking tea with a young monk - the Teng that they are looking for. They run into Doug and Brad who invite them out for the night but they decline since they are now suspicious of them. A boy who is hanging around their bicycles hands them a note from Teng - they are to follow the handicapped boy. After a long journey they come to Sera Monastery where the monks feed them. Exhausted, they all fall asleep by the fire. They are abruptly woken up by Chinese soldiers looking for them. They escape with two monks – NGU and MINGYU, who are to take them to Teng – the one hundred and fifty year old blind monk. On the way, they take shelter from the driving hailstone, in a derelict hut, where Blake reflects on how he came to be in that position. Carrying on their journey over the mountain, they come across a ravine with a secret cave entrance, here they find Teng. He tells them that the real Teng died one hundred years ago – but that it was he that sent the letter.
The weary group are eager to hear Tengs story, but he insists that they all eat and sleep first. With the help of a special herb tea, they all sleep for two days whilst Teng meditates in the Lotus position. The Westerners awaken and quietly debate philosophy. Teng, upon coming out of his meditations hears them, and is amused. He tells them a story of how as a medical student he was assigned to live with and take care of the Dali Lama. He even had his very own room next to his office – the same room that Blake sensed when they were in the palace. Teng and the boy can communicate telepathically and Blake finds out that his visions and voices are connected to Teng because the golden statue is attuned to his mind. Soldiers search the ravine for the cave entrance but cannot find it. Teng tells them the story of how he came across the Time Capsule hidden in the mountains. His sole purpose in life now fulfilled, he dies. The two monks perform a traditional Tibetan death ceremony to guide the old man’s soul to the afterlife. After three day, Blake pays his respects and Tengs body is taken and laid out on the rocks for the vultures – an old Tibetan tradition. Funeral rites over, the group begin their hazardous mountain climb in search of the Time Capule. They are surprised to encounter Doug and Brad – American agents who have tracking devices hidden in the trio’s belongings. Disarmed by the two monks - who are expert martial artists, the two agents are allowed to accompany them. But Chinese soldiers are also on their trail. Climbing the mountain, Leo falls and is hurt. The soldiers nearly catch them but Doug and Brad lead them off in a different direction and are killed in the process. High up the mountain they come across a hidden tunnel, as explained by Teng, however; once inside, they come across a seemingly impenetrable rock fall blocking their way. A strange unexplainable urge comes over Blake; Teng impressing on his mind that the rock fall isn’t what it seems. The rocks are cleared away and the continue their journey deep inside the mountain where they come across the Time Capsule – a large cavern full of alien technological wonders far in advance of our own.
In the cavern they find that their golden statue is one of two that when in place, start an unknown generator, bringing to life all the advanced technology inside. They work their way around the cavern marvelling at all the wonders, and notice a large gaping crack across the cavern roof; evidence of past geological movement, this having caused some minor damage below. Susan comes across a smooth metallic sphere with a comfortable bucket seat in the middle. She inquisitively steps inside and sits in it. Suddenly, the device springs to life and immediately transports her to an identical sphere beneath the great pyramid of Cheops in Egypt; this turned out to be an identical Time Capsule to the one found in Tibet, the second of several dotted around the globe. Blake fearing for her safety follows on. The two come across a viewing sphere similar to a damaged one found back in Tibet. Once working, it reveals all of Earth’s history, and also life on the alien planet Volos; their airborne floating cities, their culture, their modes of transport and their spaceships. Then the alien’s council of Elders communicate in real time, their leader, Calgor, reveals that they are soon to return to Earth, he advises that all wars must stop and that Earth must now learn to live with nature.
Blake and his party must now somehow get back safely to the States to reveal their find, however; they are hindered by agents from all the major powers. Tsu happens by them and takes Susan and Leo to meet his family, then to the airport where customs stops them and searches their bags. Finding nothing, they’re able to board the plane. They find Cheung in disguise, as he is trying to sneak into American to emigrate. When they get to LAX, two FBI agents, STEVENS and THOMPSON take them to a hotel after being shot at by two mysterious figures. The three arrive at their respective apartments, but Blake finds that his was broken into and they knew the alarm code somehow. The trio meet for dinner and notice the distinctive cab they got from the airport. They’re being watched. Susan and Blake go back to her place and make love. Susan prepares a letter for delivery to the UN and enlists her ex FRANK, who works there, to deliver it. Frank notices they’re being followed. The Secretary General of the UN reads the cryptic but compelling letter and decides to meet with the trio in NYC. Stephens and Thompson get yelled at by their boss for not running a better surveillance operation on the trio. The trio meet with the UN SECRETARY GENERAL in NYC and, astounded at their find, agrees to bring it before the UN. When he does, they form a plan for excavation and retrieval of the cave in Tibet. Back in LA, Susan goes home and is kidnapped from her apartment and tied up in a room. She is told that if Blake cooperates and gives them the whereabouts of the time capsule in Tibet, no harm will come to her. Blake and Leo alter the evidence of the cave so the kidnappers won’t know its real location, while Susan is able to escape through a laundry chute and call Blake. Blake informed the U.N. security forces but one of them is a Russian double agent.
MIGUEL visits Blake. He’s a descendant of the visitors, and is able to communicate with Blake’s cat. He has telepathy and a photographic memory. He explains that Jesus, while of divine origin, was not one of them. He says his people were here fourteen thousand years ago and left mankind to learn and evolve by themselves, but two thousand years ago when mankind was stagnant they helped usher in Christianity. Blake calls Susan and Leo and they rush over to hear what transpired with Miguel. Cheung pays a visit and thanks Blake for helping him get to America. While teaching class, Blake gets a cryptic message from Susan and rushes over to her place where Leo joins them. They see - on every TV channel, radio station, and web page - the face of Miguel. Blake is astonished. An exchange is to take place - 100 earthlings for 100 of the visitors. Miguel, Blake, Susan, Leo, the President and the UN Secretary General wait to greet the visitors, who arrive in a giant sphere. Inside the craft, Calgor shows Blake, Susan and Leo to their seats and they say goodbye to Earth.