Asylum Road

B. L. Goodman

Book Cover

GENRE

HORROR ADVENTURE SUSPENSE / THRILLER ACTION DRAMA SCI-FI MYSTERY

    Core Theme

    GOOD VS. EVIL, FAMILY VALUES, PERSEVERANCE

    TIME PERIOD

    2000s

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    GRIMPS, FEMME DOOM, THE DETOUR, SOUL SEARCHER

    CHARACTER LIST

    BROOKE: 50+. LEAD. RESILIENT AND SMART.

    JAKE: 55+. TRUCK HAULER & BROOKE'S HUSBAND.

    DAKOTA: 34. SALES EXECUTIVE & BROOKE'S DAUGHTER.

    TAYLOR: 32. WEIGHT LIFTER & BROOKE'S SON.

    GRETCHEN: 12. GRIM REAPER IN TRAINING WHO DUPES BROOKE FOR HER FAMILY'S SOULS.

    SEBASTIAN: 35+. THE ACTUAL GRIM REAPER WHO KIDNAPS AND TORTURES BROOKE AND JAKE.

    Logline

    When Brooke and Jake planned the holiday of a lifetime they never expected to go on a journey that they'll never forget. They're about to have the most terrifying experience of their life and to their horror their two children become entangled in the mayhem. A mysterious girl is caught in the middle of the clamour and deceit and is desperate for a way out.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 35-54

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    New York

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Year Published: 2012

    Starting Description

    A long haul truck driver has to make one final delivery before his long awaited holiday when he and his wife become kidnapped and hunted down by a group of bikers

    Ending Description

    They eventually realize that they have to make it to a certain road in order to be safe. Hence the title Asylum Road. They make it to safety but had a tough journey getting there. They are spotted by the local police, rescued and later met at the police station by Brookes brother.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist, Happy Ending

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Jake

    Age: 54

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Masculine, Adventurous, Empathetic, Heroic, Leader, Selfless, Confident, Engaging, Aggressive, Decisive, Faithful

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Brooke

    Age: 54

    Gender: Female

    Role: Emotional

    Key Traits: Naive, Modest, Empathetic, Adventurous, Aggressive, Complex, Selfless, Obedient, Confident, Outspoken, Faithful, Honorable, Beautiful

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Dakota

    Age: 34

    Gender: Female

    Role: Sidekick

    Key Traits: Funny, Heroic, Naive, Beautiful, Empathetic, Faithful, Decisive, Engaging, Selfless, Adventurous, Aggressive, Confident

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Taylor

    Age: 32

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Aggressive, Complex, Confident, Faithful, Heroic, Adventurous, Empathetic, Engaging, Selfless

    Genre

    ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER, MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA, FANTASY

    Brief

    When Brooke and Jake set out to enjoy their awaited holiday, they are met with the most dangerous and mysterious life experience, that also puts their adult children in danger. Coming face to face with the Grim Reaper, Brooke and her family must survive this trip and get out in one piece.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The book profile does a decent job or reflecting the book. There are more details in the book that can be added to attract the audience to the book. The idea of Grim Reaper being involved would have been an immediate attention grabber for many who seek fantasy based books.

    Draw of Story

    Fantasy is a well known genre that attracts many, including myself. This story was mainly targeted towards those who love to take biking road trips across the country, however it was a bit different by making the couple Canadians instead of Americans.

    Possible Drawbacks

    There were a few spelling mistakes in the book, and so the lack of proofreading before publishing the book made it hard to get through with seriousness. Also, the perspectives kept changing with no clear indication of whose POV was being read in.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    A stellar cast and good cinematography would be the savior for this movie. The story seems a bit "been there, done that" in terms of a horror story book. In order for the movie to get recognition, the screenplay must be written in a way to attract not only horror/sci-fi movie watchers but also the targeted audience of motorcycle road-trippers and truck haulers.

    Fanbase Potential

    Unfortunately, this story isn't strong enough to have a large fanbase. Seeing their targeted audience to be a much older crowd, the writing of the script must be out of the world and casted properly to have a decent fanbase.

    Awards Potential

    There could be potential for nominations if the cinematography and production design is well done. Otherwise, I don't see potential for awards.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    GRIM REAPER, JEEPERS CREEPERS, SKINWALKERS, THE VVITCH

    What’s New About the Story

    The originality of this story solely depends on the fact that the main couple of this story are fairly older and are Canadian motorcycle enthusiasts, which represents a lot of middle white America and can be related to with that aspect. Another originality is the idea of a girl being the Grim Reaper instead of a male Grim Reaper as the usual stories go.

    Lead Characters

    Brooke is definitely more resilient than her children, even though she made them out to be the bravest and strongest in her family. Whereas when it comes to survival mode, her kids don't know anything but whining. Jake is an "illusionist", which is basically code for understand lifeforms and physics to fool the naked eye. As a couple, they compliment each other in personality and practicality when put in adverse situations.

    Uniqueness of Story

    The story in itself is not a rare gem, however, if the writing was advanced to adding more than just Grimps following the family. Even the twist of Gretchen revealing herself to be the Grim Reaper wasn't as pronounced or shocking since the signs were clear that she was more than what she was telling to be. The shock moments could be more pronounced and also the characters can be created to be relatable rather than just a generic version for the story to move forward.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    It's a work in progress because the story is familiar and has been done before in Korean Dramas and other story books of the same genre. The plot of the book does not immediately stand out in terms of staying in the fantasy realm of writing.

    Tips for Improvement

    The story needs to be a bit more fleshed out, and characters must be written in a way that is relatable to the audience. There may be an audience who can definitely relate to Brooke and Jake, however, in order to attract more than just a niche group of people, the plot must be expanded to add additional characters and mythical creatures. With respect to fantasy, this book only scratches the surface in creativity.

    Brief

    When Brooke and Jake set out to enjoy their awaited holiday, they are met with the most dangerous and mysterious life experience, that also puts their adult children in danger. Coming face to face with the Grim Reaper, Brooke and her family must survive this trip and get out in one piece.

    What We Liked

    The story was unique enough to raise eyebrows and have the imagination running wild. With an elderly couple who love motorcycle trips across the country, and the husband being a truck hauler, the demographic is pretty set for the elder audience. Not only is the target demographic unique but also the notion of a female Grim Reaper breaks the stereotype of only a male ideology of the Grim Reaper. The highlight of this plot is that it breaks gender barriers and showcases that a protagonist needn't always be a muscular man in a story, it can also be a mother who has nothing but the safety of her family in her mind.

    Film: Asylum Road would be best suitable as a motion picture due to its storyline. The plot makes for a great experience on the big screen since there will be many fantasy creatures involved, and also would be a great way for adults to go watch a movie with their friends. The demographic can also be seen as that of Americans who like to travel by having roadtrips. More older adults with motorcycles would enjoy this story, since it is geared towards their experiences with a dose of fantastical creatures to boost the storyline.

    TV: The story could be adapted into a limited series or a tv movie for a streaming service which has the potential to attract a plethora of tv watchers. Since the targeted audience is older, it would be easier to have it be movie that parents and elders can watch with their friends and family. The IP can also be optioned in the category of triumphant stories for adults who like fantasy drama.

    Key points: 1) Medium budget
    2) Breaks gender barriers
    3) Relatability for older couples
    4) Fantasy based
    5) Good guys win.

    Synopsis

    Brooke and her husband Jake are motorcycle riders who like to take road trips every few years to get away from their mundane lives. The couple have a daughter, a son, and two grandchildren. Four years before their current trip, the couple went to Gaspe Bay Peninsula where they attended a wedding for one of the members in their motorcycle group, called the Golden Wings. Brooke remembers the medieval themed wedding even to the detail of having to eat with their hands during dinner and getting interrupted by mother nature’s wrath of rain. As Jake pulls up to pick up Brooke, he delivers the bad news that his boss has asked him to deliver a trailer up to New York. Begrudgingly, Brooke agrees to accompany him only because Jake is promised two extra weeks of paid vacation for their personal trip.

    As the couple make a last pit stop to grab dinner and stay the night, Brooke gets an eerie feeling about the place. She goes to call her kids to inform that they only have a few hours drive left and that they are in a town called Fogmore. At the diner, Brooke notices that all the patrons of the joint stare and whisper around her. She begins to get a gnawing creepy feeling about the whole place but Jake reassures her that it’s just the storm outside and they will leave first light the next day. As the couple get ready to go to bed inside their truck, they hear a knock on the drivers door. Concerned for their safety, Brooke suggests that Jake doesn’t open the door, but he checks it out anyways. Jake and Brooke then get pulled down from the truck, while Jake gets kicked and beaten by a bunch of guys from a motorcycle gang, Brooke is held by a man named Sebastian who asks her where the stuff is.

    Dakota and Taylor begin driving again to visit the diner Brooke had called Taylor from, Dogpatch. As soon as they reach the diner, they notice that there was no one present there. When they asked the waitress whether Brooke and Jake had been there, the waitress snaps at them and lies that they were never there. Feeling defeated, the two have their breakfast at the diner and head out to their car. Just when they think about leaving, Taylor notices his father’s semi pick-up truck on the side of the diner, hidden away. So, Dakota and Taylor go to inspect the truck and as they decide to go to the authorities to report their parents missing, they are met with the same fate as Brooke and Jake, dragged out of the truck and pushed down to the ground. After torturing both Dakota and Taylor, the gang pushes Dakota to the cabin where Brooke is and Taylor with Jake in the shed.

    However, the family escapes and find shelter in the woods till they finally get rid of the threat. Brooke and the rest come to find the people following them are Grimps, who do the dirty work for the Grim Reaper. Escaping the ground, the family gets abducted by aliens and then escape back out into the real world, only to find themselves back to square one.

    Nearly escaping the killer bats and Grimps, they finally see a mirage and reality of a few houses and a barn in the distance. Happy to see that, the family and Gretchen begin to head towards them to only find being repelled by a wall. Jake soon comes to figure out they are repelled by a force shield. When they find a porthole, everyone escapes through the porthole to finally reach to the side of trees, animals, houses, and civilization.

    With an end in sight, the family and Gretchen climb up a mountain to find that there is only one more mountain between them and road. As they climb up and reach the top of the last mountain, they see everything in sight and are happy to find civilization. However, they all take a heavy tumble down the steep mountain and end up on the ground with major injuries. But this doesn’t hinder their spirits from sprinting to the road where there are state trooper cars passing by to rescue them. Finally, after reaching the state trooper station, the troopers make sure they are tend to, and one of them mentions that someone had been looking for them for a couple of days now. And lo and behold, it is her brother Lynn who comes to take them home. Unable to control her relief, Brooke gives her brother a big hug and thanks the troopers. One of the trooper also reveals that there was no town called Fogmore and no diner called Dogpatch where they were held captive and tortured. In order to prove that the family wasn’t hallucinating or making it up, they all travel back in the trooper’s cruiser, to only find that there truly wasn’t a town or diner present. However, Brooke finds a photo of her grand kids on the ground where they were captured to show that they weren’t making it all up. Happy to be alive and out of danger, the family gets into Lynn’s van ready to go home. But Brooke gets the eerie feeling that this wasn't the last time she was seeing the Grim Reaper.

    About The Author

    Brenda Goodman has had many dreams and life experiences that she has incorporated into her long-awaited vision of publishing a book.