MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA

A series of snapshots detailing the downward path of addiction and the fight back to the surface. It is switched around between different points in the timeline to mimic the mix up in chronology the addict is used to experiencing. Through luck the protagonist is sparred long lasting legal or physical complications unlike many others just like him.

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FIRST PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

The profile helps explain the structure and character of the story. However the logline is more a dedication of the story rather than summarizing the premise of the narrative.

The structure is interesting in that it splices unconnected moments together which creates a disorientation similar to drug use as to which is the thematic link of the piece about addiction.

It is difficult to follow the protagonist's inner conflict and transformation with the same structure. The external changes are able to be followed a bit better based on the point of addiction, but it is still hard to follow the themes of the moments chosen in how they are grouped.

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that the story is told through moments that are like a crystal ball snapshots rather than a continuous story. The vignettes are split like a deck of playing cards into different unconnected sections. It is disorienting on purpose.

The experimental nature of the drama is likely to draw a smaller audience or be limited those able to appreciate the aesthetic and themes over a linear plot.

This deals with addiction so may help gain notice for awards, but the inner conflict would have to be more clear and the themes consistently building throughout the different non-linear timeline to make the story be more easily followable.

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The originality stems from the non-linear shuffle of events that detail Crisp path to addiction and loss and his way back to himself. By linking the choices thematically the moments will make better sense being linked together even if the narrative is scattered.

Crisp is philosophical but empty and desperate however he is also resilient by the end.

The structure is unique as a shuffled deck of cards but can be hard to follow in terms of character development.

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WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

This structure seems better suited for theater as theater is the best at depicting isolation which is one of the main components of addiction. Making the characters inner conflicts more easily followed, even though the eternal conflict is out of order, would help join them thematically.