SEEK THE GODDESS
ROMANCE
20th Century (multiple decades),17th Century or Earlier
Dianah Chorlton
Logline
Seek the Goddess A spiritual journey of self discovery while in search of a lost love, a soul mate, which historically leads onto the path of the Goddess and the enlightened awakening of a Past life, lived in Ancient Egypt.
Genre
,Romance
Short Summary
Two young Lovers sailing on an elaborate vessel along the River Nile, in Ancient Egypt on a romantic journey to consummate their undying love for each other. Enchanted with each other, Tiya of Egyptian blood and Adonas, a Greek soldier enlisted in the Pharoah's Army, they both vow eternal love.
Setting
20th Century (multiple decades),17th Century or Earlier
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
,Internal Journey/Rebirth
Plot - Other Elements
Twist, Philosophical Questions,,Meaningful Message,Twist,Philosophical Questions
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Diane
Age: 16 up to 40
Gender: Female
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Patriotic, Religious, Visionary, Desperate, Leader, Complex, Faithful, Unapologetic, Outspoken, Adventurous, Complex, Confident, Insecure, Blunt, Romantic, Seductive
Additional Character Details
Name: Tiya
Age: 17 up to 23
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Aspiring, Beautiful, Charming, Insecure, Naive, Romantic, Complex, Engaging, Religious, Seductive, Sexy,Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Desperate,Engaging,Insecure,Naive,Sexy,Religious,Romantic,Secretive,Seductive
Additional Character Details
Name: Adonas
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Romantic, Seductive, Aspiring, Masculine, Confident, Engaging, Heartthrob, Patriotic, Adventurous, Charming,Aspiring,Charming,Desperate,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Obedient,Sexy,Patriotic,Blunt,Skillful,Seductive,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Name: Adonas
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Aspiring,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Desperate,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Romantic,Seductive,Lone Wolf
Genre
ROMANCE, DRAMA
Brief
Diane learns about her past life as Tiya an Ancient Egyptian as her life begins to parallel her past life's fate. Tiya had fallen in love with Adonas, a Greek soldier, but married her fiance the High Priest when Adonas disappeared while on a mission from the Pharaoh. Both Diane and Tiya were pregnant with their true love's child but were forced to abort the baby in order to be with their partner. This causes problems with their partner as it renders them infertile for future children.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile places the Ancient Egypt in the 17th century or earlier. Distinguishing this is meant to be BC would be better as the 20th century is assumed to be AD but neither are mentioned. Adonas is also mentioned twice as a character rather than his modern day equivalent when Tiya and Diane are separated as different characters.
Draw of Story
The connection between Tiya and Diane is mysterious in why they are placed parallel to one another until it is revealed Diane is a reincarnation of Tiya. At first it is interesting to see a modern day love story compared to how love progressed despite the problems it faced in Ancient Egypt. To then see how the problems are not so different because they are in fact repeating themselves is an intriguing development.
Possible Drawbacks
It is unclear for a while what Adonas and Tiya have for a conflict within their relationship despite pressure from an external timeline. As Egypt supported love relationships, it is unclear what is keeping them apart for so long. The opposite is true for Darren and Diane's relationship where their problems are what is introduced first however, there is little emotional attachment to saving their relationship without seeing the happy side of their characters to become more invested in their success.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that Diane must learn to remember her past in order to avoid the same tragic fate of Tiya, her former identity in 18th Dynasty Ancient Egypt.
Fanbase Potential
This could have a smaller dedicated fanbase of those that are a fan of romance films and or Ancient Egypt. There are confusing religious elements of mixing Ancient Egyptian Gods and Christian beliefs which might alienate some.
Awards Potential
This is unlikely to have Awards potential as romantic films rarely tend to get nominated.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
WINTER'S TALE, TULIP FEVER, CLOUD ATLAS, I ORIGINS, AGORA
What’s New About the Story
The originality stems from the reincarnation parallel between the two loves stories set between 20th century Australia and 17th century Ancient Egypt.
Lead Characters
The lead character of Diane is adventurous and open. Her tenacity is shown as her traumatic and complicated romantic past is revealed in that she can still be so open to others. Tiya is romantic, but honorable and self-sacrificing as she marries to appease others rather than wait for the one she loves.
Uniqueness of Story
This is a creative take on learning from one's past mistakes in romance. However, the two females of Diane and Tiya (despite Diane eventually gaining foresight in her hindsight of Tiya's mistakes to grow), remain solely focused on romance rather than pursuing other interests which causes them to lack some uniqueness. For example, Tiya is described as beautiful a lot by Adonis, but it is unclear what he specifically likes about her personality aside from that she is loyal and her heart belongs to him.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Creating more dimensions and conflicts for the women to parallel in their reincarnated lives outside of romance would help create more balanced characters. Diane is able to travel and discover her connection to Tiya, but she doesn't have any in depth relationships that aren't romantic while at the same time Tiya is focused solely of men, but has deep relationships with others that are glazed over due to the fixation.