A Namorada do Dom (Dom´s girlfriend)

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ROMANCE BIOGRAPHICAL DRAMA

20th Century (multiple decades),2000s,Contemporary

Dulcinéia Sañtos

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Submision Type

book

Logline

Have you ever had the impression that your life is repeating, only with different characters? Have you wondered why certain things happened to you, or why your relationships don´t flow in a easier way? Embark on this journey and let be touched by it!

Genre

Romance,Biographical,Drama

Short Summary

After an abusive relationship, woman meet a younger neighbour and start a relation, from which she will draw many lessons.

Setting

São Paulo, Goiânia

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Rags to Riches,Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Sexual Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Dulcineia

Age: Follows from 2-42

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Decisive,Faithful,Insecure,Underdog,Visionary,Romantic,Aspiring,Charming,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Armando

Age: 29

Gender: Male

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Masculine,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Heartthrob,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Seductive,Secretive,Romantic,Villainous

Additional Character Details

Name: Fernando

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Aggressive,Complex,Crazy,Educated,Leader,Lone Wolf,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Sophisticated,Outspoken,Blunt,Narcisstic,Villainous,Masculine

Additional Character Details

Name: Mother

Age: 35

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Manipulative,Unapologetic,Selfless,Narcisstic,Villainous

About The Author

Dulcinéia Sañtos Cancerian with an ascendant in Twins, number 1 in the Enneagram, ISTJ in the MBTI®, choleric in the four temperaments. She is also an holístic therapist, MBTI® certified on Myers-Briggs Foundation, Florida, and certified coach by the Neuroleadership Institute in London. She has studied Anthroposophy in Switzerland for tree years, where she lives since 2008. From observing repetitive patterns on her relationships, and from the curiosity people showed about her courage to leave behind a safe life and restart, came the wish to share this story.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning,Universal

Group Specific

black women, women

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self-published

Year Published: 2019

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-65-80457-00-7

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

After many abusive relationships and many lessons learned, Dulcineia decides to take the lead in her own life.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

No. I don't believe Dulci's mother is the antagonist. She is somewhat the cause of some of Dulci's internal conflicts, but she is not the antagonist at all.

Draw of Story

It has a good hook. It's a story that explores abusive relationships. So many people around the globe live these kinds of relationships, that it'd draw people's attention, for sure.

Possible Drawbacks

The author writes about every single abusive relationship (romantic or not) she had, and many of them seem repetitive. It sounds like a journal where you are just writing a list of facts that happened to you. If optioned, the Screenwriter will have to give it a more dramatic, exciting touch.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

Abusive relationships. This subject is very relevant (for both men and women), and it's definitely a good hook.

Fanbase Potential

I believe many people would feel represented by Dulcineia, and it could give the film a fanbase.

Awards Potential

It has some potential because it explores a very sensitive and dramatic theme. However, the drama itself needs further refinement.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

SLEEPING WITH THE ENEMY: A WOMAN CHANGES HER IDENTITY TO AVOID AN ABUSIVE RELATIONSHIP. THEN, SHE STARTS A NEW LIFE AND FINDS HAPPINESS. YOU: A STALKER FOLLOWS HIS GIRLFRIENDS AND CREATES SITUATIONS THAT FORCE THESE GIRLS TO STAY BY HIS SIDE.

What’s New About the Story

Since it's a Brazilian book, it has a unique narrative when digging the subject. It gives the story an original look.

Lead Characters

The author focuses so much on the negative parts of these relationships that everything looks very Manichaean. It'd sound more realistic if the book could avoid these bad/good characters. Also, I don't feel the protagonist is likable enough. We want to root for her, but sometimes she acts like she wants to accept those abusive moments. However, she is not stereotypical. She is not that obvious weak woman, mentally controlled, who does everything to save her marriage. Dulci is a strong woman, intelligent, capable professional, who ends up falling for abusive men. The character itself sounds great, but her actions are a little bit childish.

Uniqueness of Story

Not a rare gem. We've seen films that explore abusive relationships before. The narrative, the characters, the conflicts, and the drama should be improved to reach a higher level of distinction.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

First, it needs to be told in a more "fictional", cinematic way. It sounds more like a person remembering moments of her life than a narrative that leads you to a climax. If the idea is to make the author tell the story as a narrator in the film/series, it's ok, but we still need a more flowing story. The conflicts should show up more. In the book, they exist in the external form: the man cheated on her, the man treated her badly, they fought, she discovered she was being cheated on again. However, we barely see the internal conflicts. How does she feel when she was betrayed. What is going on inside her? It's everything too subtle such as "I was devastated," but in the next scene, she is already talking to another man, trying to make her husband feel jealous. Too generic and too quick. I understand that every person acts differently when facing abuse, but I believe that films like this demand emotional scenes, those that will make us understand the extent of the problem. We need this pause in the action to see how she is feeling. We need to understand what she is thinking. We need to understand why she is accepting those situations over and over, otherwise, we cannot root for her the way she deserves. Abusive relationships are a very sensitive subject, and it requires a well-built narrative to inspire those who are going through the same thing, and also to give this subject the importance it needs. Despite those details that need refinement, I love the idea that this story begins in Brazil and ends in Switzerland. It's a rare combination that could deliver a beautiful and interesting result.