ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA, FANTASY

A corporate prince's social life is turned upside down when he suddenly contracts Bell's Palsy. A woman is burdened with taking care of her ailing mother and must make a difficult decision to put her in a retirement home for better care. A chance encounter on a dating website leads to a true connection between the two and they are able to help each other fix their problems. It is a modern adaptation of “Beauty and the Beast.”

FAIR

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Yes, the story reflects the outline of the book. In the logline it says "One caring for her Alzheimer's afflicted mother and the other" but there is only one woman protagonist. By changing the logline from "her" to "their" the ambiguity will make more sense.

The concept that the fairy godmother premise is adapted into dating websites is wickedly creative and the use of Bell's palsy to create "a beast" is also a fresh take on the concept.

The lead up to the relationship was very slow paced and felt unearned in their original strong emotions. Once the relationship was formed, it's passion relied purely on physical acts and did not advance the plot or emotional arcs in the repetition of their joining.

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that the successful man suddenly develops Bell's palsy and has to deal with adversity for the first time in his life. The other hook is that he is in love with two women who are actually the same woman, but he doesn't know it. The third hook is a dating service provided by fairy godmothers.

This could have a large fanbase for those who enjoy romance movies or fairytale adaptations.

Depending on the genre it is adapted into, this currently might win adult film awards due to the physical nature of many scenes, but not mainstream acting or cinematic awards. This is due to the adaptation being a set storyline and many of the characters lacking a broad range of emotional depth.

MEDIUM BUDGET

BEASTLY, THE DIVING BELL AND THE BUTTERFLY, ONCE UPON A TIME, JANE EYRE

The original aspects of the story are the Bell's palsy creating a Beast and the fairy godmother dating service. Bringing out more about the fairy godmother dating service rather than other static side characters could help develop this part and focusing more on a story from the "beast" perspective rather than both love interests or Belle would also bring a different take to the love story.

The lead characters’ problems help them stand out. Daniel has Bell's palsy and is already withdrawn from most people, and Crystal is struggling to take care of her mother with Alzheimer's. Both characters have or deal with an illness that is often not represented on screen.

As it is, this is a pretty standard telling of the outline of “Beauty and the Beast.” By adding unexpected twists and focusing on the unique aspects of the story's modern adaptations rather than the romance, will lead to a more surprising plot. Also giving the side characters subplots will help justify many of their inclusions to create a dynamic rather than static caste.

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

By adding depth to the side characters and having actions behind the character's personalities rather than telling with words or explanations, the emotional journey of the characters will feel more lived-in and real.