The Beast Within

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Liz Cowan

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A contemporary twist on Beauty and the Beast, with a touch of magic to spice things up. Crystal Belle St. James and Daniel Di Domenico: One caring for her Alzheimer's afflicted mother and the other disfigured by Bell's palsy. Enter Blindfold, Inc. a unique dating service.



Short Summary

A chance glimpse across the room sets Crystal and Daniel on a journey of discovery of themselves and future possibilities.


Dallas and North Texas

Based on a True Story


Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes


Main Character Details

Name: Crystal Belle St. James

Age: late 20s

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Confident,Complex,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Educated,Funny,Selfless,Sexy,Honorable

Additional Character Details

Name: Daniel Di Domenico

Age: mid 30s

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Confident,Complex,Decisive,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Lone Wolf,Sophisticated,Sexy

Additional Character Details

Name: Meredith

Age: of undetermined age

Gender: Female

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Complex,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Flexible,Secretive

Additional Character Details

Name: Todd

Age: 30s

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Aggressive,Complex,Lone Wolf,Underdog

About The Author

Born in Budapest, Hungary, she met and married the love of her life in Oklahoma. Now they live on several acres in the rolling hills of North Texas on what she dubbed The Funny Farm. When she is not immersed in spinning tales, she writes a weekly humor column and enjoys gardening. Liz Cowan is a weaver of tales — suspense and romance with a touch of paranormal. Why paranormal? Whether you choose to accept it or not, we all possess powers beyond the norm. For example, those gut feelings you get—that is a message to pay attention or suffer the consequences. Her life

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available



B078JHD165 (Amazon)




A corporate prince's social life is turned upside down when he suddenly contracts Bell's Palsy. A woman is burdened with taking care of her ailing mother and must make a difficult decision to put her in a retirement home for better care. A chance encounter on a dating website leads to a true connection between the two and they are able to help each other fix their problems. It is a modern adaptation of “Beauty and the Beast.”

Overall Rating


Point of View


Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the story reflects the outline of the book. In the logline it says "One caring for her Alzheimer's afflicted mother and the other" but there is only one woman protagonist. By changing the logline from "her" to "their" the ambiguity will make more sense.

Draw of Story

The concept that the fairy godmother premise is adapted into dating websites is wickedly creative and the use of Bell's palsy to create "a beast" is also a fresh take on the concept.

Possible Drawbacks

The lead up to the relationship was very slow paced and felt unearned in their original strong emotions. Once the relationship was formed, it's passion relied purely on physical acts and did not advance the plot or emotional arcs in the repetition of their joining.

Use of Special Effects


Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that the successful man suddenly develops Bell's palsy and has to deal with adversity for the first time in his life. The other hook is that he is in love with two women who are actually the same woman, but he doesn't know it. The third hook is a dating service provided by fairy godmothers.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase for those who enjoy romance movies or fairytale adaptations.

Awards Potential

Depending on the genre it is adapted into, this currently might win adult film awards due to the physical nature of many scenes, but not mainstream acting or cinematic awards. This is due to the adaptation being a set storyline and many of the characters lacking a broad range of emotional depth.

Envisioned Budget


Similar Films/TV Series


What’s New About the Story

The original aspects of the story are the Bell's palsy creating a Beast and the fairy godmother dating service. Bringing out more about the fairy godmother dating service rather than other static side characters could help develop this part and focusing more on a story from the "beast" perspective rather than both love interests or Belle would also bring a different take to the love story.

Lead Characters

The lead characters’ problems help them stand out. Daniel has Bell's palsy and is already withdrawn from most people, and Crystal is struggling to take care of her mother with Alzheimer's. Both characters have or deal with an illness that is often not represented on screen.

Uniqueness of Story

As it is, this is a pretty standard telling of the outline of “Beauty and the Beast.” By adding unexpected twists and focusing on the unique aspects of the story's modern adaptations rather than the romance, will lead to a more surprising plot. Also giving the side characters subplots will help justify many of their inclusions to create a dynamic rather than static caste.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation



While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

By adding depth to the side characters and having actions behind the character's personalities rather than telling with words or explanations, the emotional journey of the characters will feel more lived-in and real.