DRAMA, RELIGION, ROMANCE

Kidnapped at birth and raised by a mob family in Italy, Milena struggles to reunite with her soul mate and rediscover her origins. In the end, despite some tragedies, she reunites with her father and begins a love story with some help from the spiritual plane.

FAIR

SCRIPT

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Yes, except for the character descriptions, which were wrongly filled with information about the author.

The story begins long before the girl's abduction, in a narrative of corruption that turns out to be not so central to the story. This ends up distracting the attention, and the main hook takes a while to appear.

Too many romantic clichés and excessive exposure in the dialogues make the story drag on in many moments.

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is a young woman's search for her origins after being a crime victim and her involvement in a tragic love story.

The theme is strong and impactful, but the story is currently too generic to attract a large fanbase. It lacks elements that differentiate it from others and can generate greater interest in the public.

It shouldn't be a big contender for Awards. Specifically, it is necessary to invest more time and effort on the dialogue and develop characters and situations further.

MEDIUM BUDGET

WHAT DREAMS MAY COME - A RECENTLY DEAD MAN MUST UNDERTAKE A PERILOUS AFTERLIFE JOURNEY TO RESCUE HIS SUICIDAL WIFE'S SOUL. CHANGELING - AFTER HAVING HER YOUNG SON KIDNAPPED, A WOMAN IS TOLD HE HAS BEEN FOUND. HOWEVER, WHEN SHE WELCOMES HIM HOME, SHE REALIZES THAT YOUNG MAN IS NOT THE SON WHO WAS TAKEN FROM HER.

The most original aspect of the story is that it mixes a child abduction narrative with a story with natural and religious touches about the afterlife. However, the plot could integrate these elements more naturally and convincingly.

The protagonist is a determined young woman who believes in love and justice despite growing up in an environment dominated by crime. Thanks to this sense of honesty and her relentless pursuit of what is right, she ends up having a happy ending, ultimately finding her father and also the love of her life.

It's not a rare gem. There are still many issues with dialogue and script development that need to be resolved for it to actually work.

Film

WORK IN PROGRESS

The script is a work in progress because many dialogues still sound unnatural, filled with information that doesn't make much sense when they appear. Also, narrative development is occasionally confusing. The mix of supernatural and religious elements with a straightforward plot of abduction and true love doesn't always work, often sounding strange and out of place. The characters themselves also demand further development. The plot's visions of good and evil are almost always Manichean - except for the somewhat redemptive ending - which is not necessarily a negative aspect. Still, nearly all the characters seem very superficial and shallow. This makes it difficult for us to care about them and their trajectories.

The main thing to do is to be careful about overexposure dialogue, especially at the beginning of the script. Much information that would not appear naturally in a conversation is thrown into the script only to inform the audience. The problem is that this kind of resource constantly breaks the narrative and makes a good part of the situations depicted unbelievable. Ideally, review the vast majority of dialogue to find ways to convey that information a little more convincingly — or even, in some cases, leaving some stuff hanging can be positive for the film. There is also a structural problem, as the characters we followed at the story's beginning simply disappear from the script and only reappear towards the end. Therefore, the audience's emotion invested in their drama can end up being lost, making it difficult to connect with the narrative. Why not allow us to continue to accompany them occasionally throughout the story? In general, there is a lack of information about who all these people are, beyond their journeys. That is, what they like, what they are afraid of, what amuses them, etc. It would enrich the characters and is another element that could make us like or dislike them. Therefore, a lengthy revision focusing on some of these points can improve the script, possibly making it even more thought-provoking and compelling.