Paid in Full - A Vampire Romance, Kelly Kennedy Series Book One

Jamie L Biggs

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GENRE

URBAN FANTASY

    Core Theme

    KELLY’S URGE TO FIND A PLACE TO BELONG, AND HOW SHE WAS NEVER REALLY ALONE.

    TIME PERIOD

    2000s

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    LOST BOYS, TRUE BLOOD, BUFFY: THE VAMPIRE SLAYER, SUPERNATURAL

    CHARACTER LIST

    KELLY KENNEDY: 18. LEAD. SMART AND DETERMINED.

    GRANT COOPER: 250+. VAMPIRE & KELLY’S LIFE BOND.

    JOE KENNEDY: 45+. KELLY’S FATHER.

    FINN BAILEY: CENTURIES OLD. ANTAGONIST & VAMPIRE LORD.

    ALEX: CENTURIES OLD. ALEX MAKER & VAMPIRE LORD.

    NICK: 50+. GRANT’S RIGHT HAND KELLY’S CLOSEST FRIEND.

    Logline

    Kelly's father gets into trouble with a vampire, Finn Bailey and agrees to trade Kelly to him for his debt paid in full. Finn's enemy, Grant Cooper realizes Kelly is his fated mate and kidnaps her to protect her from Finn, claiming her has his.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34

    Target Gender: Female Leaning

    Setting

    Las Vegas

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Jamie L Biggs

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    The story opens as Kelly and her father, Joe Kennedy go to a hotel bar in Las Vegas to meet with a potential mark, Finn Bailey. Joe is a con man and thinks he will be able to make money with a shady business deal with Finn.

    Ending Description

    Kelly finds out that she is half-human and half-fae and promised to the Unseelie prince by her grandfather, King of the Seelie. She decides to become vampire to avoid this arranged marriage.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

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    Mature Audience Themes

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    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain,Rebellion Against 'The One',Other

    Main Character Details

    Name: Kelly Kennedy

    Age: 18

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Obedient,Desperate,Engaging,Romantic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Educated,Naive,Adventurous,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Funny

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    Development Pitch

    Kelly wants to get far away from her father, Joe and small time criminal. She has been a pawn in his con games for too long and wants out. What she doesn't know is she may not get away from him fast enough before she gets pulled into the dark supernatural world of vampires.

    Genre

    SUSPENSE, THRILLER, ROMANCE, DRAMA, FANTASY

    Brief

    A young woman sees herself being delivered to a crime lord by her own father. This drags her into the supernatural world intrigues. Kelly became life-bonded to a vampire called Grant and discovers she is part fae.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: GOOD

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: EXCELLENT

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    It is accurate.

    Draw of Story

    The characters, especially Kelly. She looks complex and smart since page one, and has a coherent development arc, being the main conductor to the narrative. She gets the spotlight by having good dialogues and attitude even when the circumstances or the story itself doesn’t help her, like in the period he is living as a hostage under Grant’s.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The story is not well written, and this plot was already repeated many times before, including in a very popular book series that turned in a TV show, like happened to True Blood. But focusing in the small, local, scales can turn this plot in something interesting with good characters and some fun magical and brutal moments.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    Kelly’s arc. How she goes from the daughter of a con man to a fae princess while being central to a vampire lords’ war. And how she takes control over her on life.

    Fanbase Potential

    Even saturated with vampire and supernatural hidden societies’ stories, I think the public interested in these Urban Fantasy movies and TV Shows are very eager for even more content like this. They want nice characters to relate and good, thrilling ships to have.

    Awards Potential

    Only with the focus on characters and special effects. These are the main strengths of Paid in Full, with anyone who plays Kelly’s role possessing a good award potential if well conducted.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    LOST BOYS, TRUE BLOOD, BUFFY: THE VAMPIRE SLAYER, SUPERNATURAL

    What’s New About the Story

    To be honest, there’s nothing original about this story, the plot is very similar to True Blood even in the characterizations and in the plot development but can become more unique taking the story far from the vampires and faes, having Kelly to discover her origin for herself and not as some toy being held by these powerful supernatural creatures. She has the potential to do this.

    Lead Characters

    Kelly is very smart and independent. She is a person who grew up deprived from a normal family and had to develop the abilities to survive with a con man as a father. She explores a lot of this potential, but she can do much more without the chains imposed to her by the story, like being Grant’s hostage and only moving forward when someone kidnaps her.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No, it’s not. This can be improved getting the story into another direction, giving more agency to Kelly and having her explore this supernatural world she just discovered.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    Because this is not a original story yet. Paid in Full replicates a lot of well-known movies and tv shows about vampires and the supernatural. But it has a character full of potential in Kelly and can exploit her to turn this story into something special.

    Tips for Improvement

    Delivering the plot into Kelly’s hand, making her the lead character she can be, using her as an active agent in presenting the public to this supernatural world.

    Brief

    Kelly’s follows her father in what looks like another excuse deal with some crime lord. What she doesn’t imagine is that Finn, the man with whom her father has a deal, will be the door to a new, supernatural world. She is kidnapped by a vampire called Grant, who sees her as his fated mate, someone who is bonded to him by the destiny and wants to protect her.

    What We Liked

    Kelly has a huge potential to become a very good character, she only needs to have more agency over her own narrative. She is also surrounded by other interesting characters as Nick and Joe, and a fascinating world — even not being original.

    Film: As a movie this story can lean a little more to the horror genre, with Kelly being caught by this hidden supernatural world when she leaves her father’s house, discovering she is being hunted by Finn and getting close to Grant, who wants to protect her from the beginning, but from Kelly’s point of view, looks more like being stalked by this hypnotic, scary man. Think in something like The Lost Boys.

    TV: Paid in Full have the potential to be a supernatural-like TV show, where Kelly is held as hostage by Grant, but escape with Nick’s help and start to explore this new world discovered by her, in a monster of the week structure. Everything while Finn and Grant hunt them both, each one with his own reasons. The fae concept can be slowly introduced, but trough Kelly’s eyes, not with someone explaining the plot to her. Kelly and Nick have a good chemistry to deliver a fan favorite duo with little comedy and a lot of drama.

    Key points:
    1. The main character.
    2. The good guys win in the end.
    3. Hints a sequence.
    4. Urban fantasy is a very popular genre.
    5. Fits very well to a young adult audience.

    Synopsis

    KELLY KENNEDY watches her father JOE negotiating with a crime lord in Las Vegas, she doesn’t like the situation. Her father already has a job but insists on these excuse deals. KELLY does not like FINN, the mobster, she sees him as a threat to her and JOE.

    In another place, GRANT is called by ALEX, his maker. They’re both vampires, and they also have some business to deal with FINN, the crime lord who KELLY and JOE met. He is also a vampire. There are rumors about him kidnapping humans to sell as blood bags. GRANT is sent to FINN's place, where he is receiving guests for a poker night. This is where KELLY and GRANT meet each other for the first time, and the vampire feels something different for her.

    After a fight with her father, KELLY run away from home. GRANT’s vampire partners find KELLY, rescue her and make her safe from JOE and his debts. KELLY confronts GRANT when they finally met. She thinks he is the one wanting to kidnap her to make JOE pay his debts. KELLY eventually understands she must trust GRANT, at least for now. KELLY discovers this mysterious energy emanates from her. She is part fae and this is the kind of thing that can generate a political crisis inside the supernatural world.

    This moves KELLY forward, creating a conflict between her and GRANT about her condition as a hostage. GRANT gives her the truth: he is not able to free KELLY, because he serves ALEX wishes as being his creator, and he must obey his Master Vampire.
    GRANT then makes KELLY a proposal: she proves to him and ALEX she can have the freedom needed, offering her the possibility of going out alone, only having to assure she’ll be back until the end of the day. But not before some self-defense training.

    KELLY discovers at the same time that her father is dead, and her deceased mother wasn’t human. It bothers her so much that it drives her to run away with NICK's, one of GRANT's men, help. FINN captures KELLY and NICK in a mall. He says KELLY’s grandfather made a deal with him to retrieve her as a favor. KELLY meets her grandfather and discovers her fae name: KELLIA.

    She is a princess among the fae. Her grandfather confesses being the one who demanded FINN to find her, and he planned to do this by negotiating her with JOE. But GRANT rescues her before the FAE KING takes her to his world. KELLY feels at home for the first time in her life when she is at GRANT's place, but there is no time much time. ALEX says the KING is still after her, and the only way to keep KELLY safe is by marrying her to a vampire, forming a life bond. She accepts.

    About The Author

    Jamie L Biggs is a storyteller, coffee addict, and paranormal romance writer who now lives with her husband and family in Phoenix, Arizona.