Mine, Body and Soul: Trilogy
Submision Type
book
Logline
Two men, with past's that make them both vulnerable. A Dom, the other not part of the lifestyle, try to figure out how to navigate their feelings and the impact this has when one man is scared through life-changing events and the other who has damage through carelessness, that requires surgery.
Genre
Romance
Short Summary
Nathan meets Lenny at his best friend and business partners restaurant. The attraction is instant but Nathan is conflicted by Lenny not being apart of his lifestyle and naive. Lenny's life is complicated by a stoma he has. Never having had a boyfriend he confused by his own submissive behaviour.
Setting
London
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Other
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending
Mature Audience Themes
Nudity,Extreme Violence
Main Character Details
Name: Nathan
Age: 42
Gender: Male
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Charming,Sexy,Selfless,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Adventurous,Skillful,Seductive,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Honorable,Heroic,Gracious
Additional Character Details
Name: Lenny
Age: 25
Gender: Male
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Modest,Obedient,Clumsy,Complex,Selfless,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Funny,Romantic,Naive
Additional Character Details
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Genre
ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE, LGBT
Brief
Nathan and Lenny meet and have an instant attraction. Nathan is a dominant and wants to teach Lenny how to be a submissive. They both have traumatic events that need to work on to be together. Lenny learns about the world of BDSM while his and Nathan's relationship blossoms.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: GOOD
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes the book profile accurately reflects the story.
Draw of Story
Nathan and Lenny have a very strong attraction as soon as they see each other. There is also an interesting look into the world of BDSM.
Possible Drawbacks
The book relies heavily on the sex to drive the plot. If there was more focus on the world of BDSM and not seeing it through the constructs of Lenny and Nathan's relationship, it could be more interesting.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that this is Fifty Shades of Grey with a same sex couple. I would watch this movie but it needs more substance.
Fanbase Potential
This will not have a large fanbase even though it is very similar to Fifty Shades of Grey. I do not think that main audiences are open to an explicit sex film with a gay couple yet. Fifty Shades of Grey had lots of backlash and that displayed an all American couple.
Awards Potential
This story, as is, does not have awards potential. It is centered around BDSM and not in an artistic way. It could have awards potential if it showed insight into the BDSM world and focused on the LGBTQIA community within.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
FIFTY SHADES OF GREY, SECRETARY, CALL ME BY NAME
What’s New About the Story
The story is original because it shows the relationship between a gay couple in the BDSM world. The format it follows, however, is not original as it is about intense attraction and sexual desire only. There are many stories like this in which the sex scenes are the most important part.
Lead Characters
The lead characters are somewhat polarizing. Nathan is an alpha male who is a dominant, and aggressive. Lenny was very meek and anxious which sometimes made the relationship seem abusive. The relationship was always consensual.
Uniqueness of Story
This is an average story about sex and lust with a little bit of love and romance thrown in. It can be improved by either focusing on the BDSM community or deepening the emotional connection between Lenny and Nathan.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
To make this a consider, there would need to be more of an emotional storyline. Much of the story is about the next sexual trial Nathan can put Lenny through. They do get engaged at the end, but it wasn't a satisfying end considering the journey the characters take.