Two Many Wives
GENRE
COMEDY FAMILY ROMANCE MELODRAMA LGBT
Core Theme
A STEADY COUPLE OF YOUNG FEMALES IS LOOKING FOR A MALE PLUS ONE TO START A FAMILY.
TIME PERIOD
Contemporary
COMPARABLE TITLES
YOU ME HER
CHARACTER LIST
JEREMY REID, 3. LEAD. CHARMING, ROMANTIC, SUCCESSFUL.
NICOLE DURAND, 28. MEMBER OF THE THROUPLE. FUN, ENGAGING, CUTE, HARDWORKING.
LESLIE SINCLAIR, 29. MEMBER OF THE THROUPLE. SEDUCTIVE, ROMANTIC.
ANNTONETTE. 35. NICOLE'S BOSS AT THE GALLERY. SERIOUS, TENSE, INFLEXIBLE.
Logline
A committed couple Nicole Durand and Leslie Sinclair decide the only way to have kids is to find a committed father. He must love them as much as they love each other.They will live together and build a family from this relationship,
Genre
Comedy,Family,Romance,Melodrama,LGBT
Target Audiences
Age: 18-34,35-54,55+
Target Gender: Universal
Setting
Midwest Urban
Based on a True Story
No
Starting Description
Leslie and Nicole discover one of their possible candidates for a shared husband and father is a cartoonist and author Jeremy Reid. After considering him and agreeing he's their guy, they propose to him and he accepts. From this point, the process is working out everyday issues and expectations.
Ending Description
This is a series. Think of this as "Three Is Company" with benefits. I would write it in thirty-minute episodes. I have two complete seasons (12 episodes). I wrote the pilot as an hour to flesh out the characters and set the plot.
Pitch Adaptation
I see this story as a reflection of family life in modern society. The conflicts and solutions these three face are typical of any family. But what is a family when we bring friends into our family by making them honorary brothers and sisters? How do two people form a family? Why does communication between spouses fall apart? There are no nude scenes in my script. Characters will flirt, embrace and kiss each other, but actors will not be asked to simulate foreplay or intercourse. Instead, all the sex is implied. The reason is to allow the viewer to fill in that activity with their own imagination. The hard parts, the day-to-day living with each other, working out who does what and what is to be done, are the guts of the show.
WGA Number
The author has not yet written this
Mature Audience Themes
Language/Profanity
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth
Main Character Details
Name: Jeremy Reid
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Funny,Romantic
Additional Character Details
Name: Nicole Durand
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Funny,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Sexy,Blunt,Outspoken,Romantic,Seductive
Additional Character Details
Name: Nicole Durand
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Unapologetic,Seductive,Romantic,Funny,Outspoken,Selfless,Sexy
Additional Character Details
Name: Leslie Sinclair
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Aspiring,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Seductive,Romantic,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Sexy
Supplemental Materials
Information not completed
Genre
ROMANCE, DRAMA, LGBT
Brief
Nicole, a museum curator, wants to start a family with her partner of 6 years, a doctor named Leslie. They search for a potential father for their children but seek more than just a sperm donor. Nicole finds promise in one of her museum's donors, the cartoonist, Jeremy Reid. The women take him into their fold and he gladly accepts, but Nicole's job becomes in jeopardy due to their situation.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: EXCELLENT
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: FAIR
Premise: EXCELLENT
Structure: GOOD
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The profile very accurately describes the story although there are two improvements that could be beneficial. Nicole is listed twice in the character details instead of Jeremy. And part of the short summary comparing the premise to the sitcom "Three's Company" with benefits would be better in the development pitch about why the story is marketable.
Draw of Story
Yes the hook is clear from the start that the couple is looking to add a third in a respectful and longterm manner.
Possible Drawbacks
There is the unsure nature of whether Jeremy will accept their offer, but once they are together, only Nicole seems to have stakes to loose. The other two characters don't have foreseeable conflicts to carryover throughout the season. By adding their own inner conflicts to the character or separate subplots, there will be more of an idea about what will carry in terms of conflict throughout multiple episodes.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that this is a relationship drama with polyamory and a throuple are the main characters.
Fanbase Potential
This could definitely have a large modern fanbase due to its unique family makeup, however certain conflicts and character development would need to be more pronounced.
Awards Potential
This may have awards potential depending on the issues discussed and emotional range of the relationship as the themes and characters are pretty composed and level in the first episode.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
THIS IS US, THREE'S COMPANY, HAPPY ENDINGS, 2 BROKE GIRLS, HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER, TWO AND A HALF MEN, MOMS
What’s New About the Story
The originality stems from the couple dynamic rather that their occupations, so focusing less on their work and more on their personalities and different interactions would strengthen their characters to produce more character driven proactive plots.
Lead Characters
Nicole is curious, responsible and loving. Jeremy is calm, patient and open-minded. Leslie is hard-working, direct and sensual.
Uniqueness of Story
This as a neat concept, but the characters themselves could use more development with inner conflicts. The main conflicts for the season's B story is also uncertain for future episodes.
Possible Formats
Television
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
The characters' focus a lot on their job and the working side of their relationship. There are no lasting conflicts nor is there a conflict in Jeremy joining the setup. The B story of the series is not apparent.
Tips for Improvement
Focusing more on the character's inner conflicts to set up series long conflicts and transformations outside of jobs would better display the relationship dynamics and potential relationship issues in the pilot. The dialogue contains a lot of exposition, but more nuanced and distinct speech patterns could also help diversify the character development outside of their profession.
Brief
A steady couple of two young bissexual females is ready to start a family. They are looking for a father to their children and, when Nicole meets Jeremy, she sees in him the ideal man to be the third one in their relationship. As Nicole meets Jeremy and also approves him, they move in together and begin their routine as a throuple.
What We Liked
Even though the core theme may be polemic - which is also a good thing -, the pilot proposed by the author brings along a light-hearted and seductive approach to the beginning of a romantic relationship between three people.
Film: It would be a great adaptation for Film because the set up of the throuple and the plot of the relationship coming together is original and sensuous, enough in itself to capture audience's attention.
TV: This would be a great adaptation for TV because plots may revolve around the challenges of living life as a throuple in modern society, which may apparently be more open to different types of relationship but may turn out more conservative than it would present itself to be.
Key points: Original plot; Sensuous passages; Polyamorous throuple; Lgbt theme; provocative plot.
Synopsis
Nicole is talking to her boss on an exhibition at the art gallery she works for when she spots a man that stands out from the crowd.
She is informed by her boss, Anntonette, that the casually dressed man is a famous cartoonist who also happens to be one of the most important sponsors of the gallery.
When they meet, Jeremy asks Nicole out after the exhibition, and they meet for a drink. After getting along very well, Jeremy seems to be very interested in Nicole and they have dinner together the next day.
Next take is Nicole waking up in her apartment and talking to Leslie about Jeremy. Nicole and Leslie kiss, and they discuss if he would be a good fit for what they've been searching for: a man to be a part of their relationship and become the father of their children.
Both agree to invite him over for dinner to see if him and Leslie get along well.
Anntonette, Nicole's boss, shows concerns about the girl dating a key contributor of the gallery.
Jeremy arrives at their apartment with flowers and wine, and is surprised by how Leslie is trying to seduce him.
The next week, Nicole travels for work and Leslie asks Jeremy on a date. He finds it weird but says yes. They have dinner, see a play and later on Leslie invites him to their apartment. He asks Leslie if Nicole is not interested in him anymore as she is clearly interested, and she explains that they have been a couple for the last 6 years, and are looking for a man to start a family.
Jeremy wakes up hangover in their sofa, and Leslie takes care of him. The next day, Jeremy and Leslie sleep together and he wakes up in their. Leslie calls Nicole, with Jeremy listening, and says he passed the test.
When Nicole arrives, the two also have their intimate time together while Leslie finishes cooking.
Afterwards, the three have a conversation and the girls propose Jeremy to move in and become a throuple. He agrees and makes practical questions about money and other arrangements.
Jeremy invites the girls over to his place, which they find amazing, and invite the girls to move in.
Jeremy reveals he is also a best-selling author - under the pen name of Peter Nan - who had two books turned into famous movies.
They move in and begin their relationship happily, but Nicole is still concerned with the reactions of her boss Anntonette.