Astral Destiny
Submision Type
book
Logline
Uma anomalia espaço-temporal que é detectada na Lua. Um estranho objecto. Uma descoberta que dará a toda a humanidade a hipótese de dar o próximo passo na escadaria da evolução. Uma viagem aos lugares mais recônditos da mente, que lhes proporcionará um destino que nunca pensaram ser possível...
Genre
Action,Adventure,Drama,Fantasy,Sci-fi,Romance
Short Summary
John recebe um telefonema de Dr. Sammuel a informar que descobriram algo na Lua. Jonh terá de ir à Lua reaver o objecto descoberto. Quando toca no objecto Jonh adquire força psiônica que lhe permite viajar no plano Astral. Nesse plano conhece a princesa AyeRas que lhe faz uma surpreendente revelação
Setting
Planetas Terra, Leydas e Areet
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest
Plot - Other Elements
Philosophical Questions,Coming of Age
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: John
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Aspiring,Modest,Badass,Confident,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Gracious
Additional Character Details
Name: Princesa AyeRas
Age: 25
Gender: Other
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Badass,Sexy,Heroic,Empathetic,Engaging,Gracious,Sophisticated
Additional Character Details
Name: K´raan
Age: 45
Gender: Male
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Aggressive,Villainous,Crazy,Criminal
Additional Character Details
Name: Engenheira Pink
Age: 30
Gender: Lgbt
Role: logical
Key Traits: Confident,Sophisticated,Leader,Visionary,Skillful
Genre
ACTION, ROMANCE, FANTASY
Brief
A team of astrophysics detect an anomaly on the moon, and John, from the security team, is sent there to evaluate. He is gifted a surprising tool which allows humanity to explore unforeseen dimensions.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile reflects the book accurately.
Draw of Story
The sequence of facts - a door in the middle of the moon, a strange object allowing men to travel different dimensions - is highly improbable and the sequence of facts are, due to that, very intriguing. The unlikelihood of the sequences and the unforeseeable characters and scenarios are surprisingly enticing. The plot reminds us, as the title suggests, the absurdities and randomness of dreams - in which, while we're on them, we often follow along the logics, as absurd as they seem.
Possible Drawbacks
The names of characters make the narrative appear too random, as people from the same fiction core have names such as "Pink" and "Alexandria Latterman". Even if those names have meaning, they should have some more logic based on them as these are people in the same "dimension". The randomness of facts is both a weakness and a strength, as it makes you think nothing is logical at the same time it keeps the reader intrigued.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
An inclination for fantasy and the exploration of a mystic logic, triggered by the world of dreams we don't completely understand and outer space adventures is a rich subject that would make me watch this movie.
Fanbase Potential
If adapted and backed up by a stronger logic uniting all the dimensions involved in the narrative, it could have a large fanbase as the audience would be drawn into solving mysteries and unveiling possible truths behind the revelations uncovered by characters.
Awards Potential
It could also have awards potential as it relies heavily in special effects and the sequence of facts would need a solid plot to become adaptable.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
INCEPTION
What’s New About the Story
The story is highly unique as it brings together improbable universes with the most varied logics involving different and improbable dimensions.
Lead Characters
John is a true hero as he is very masculine, courageous, physically fit and has strong morals. Princesa AyeRas is also an interesting character from an unusual nature, from a different universe and is brave and empathetic.
Uniqueness of Story
As a fantasy story, it's highly creative. However, even fantasy stories with no connection to reality or compromise with feasibility should still comply with a set of internal rules to keep fiction consistency, which is lacking in the plot. There's also a need for a clearer metaphor or a plot relatable to the world of the audience.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Network, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The story could be changed in order to make it more consistent and sophisticated, giving more depth to characters and dimensions. The dimensions and logics involved in the worlds should be deeper explored and explanations for unusual things could be done in a way that would make sense for general audience as a clearer metaphor or something else other than just the world of dreams.