Amongst and Above All

Willie Hirsh

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GENRE

ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA WAR SUSPENSE/THRILLER MYSTERY

    Core Theme

    JUSTICE, POWER

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary,2000s

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    OLYMPUS HAS FALLEN, JACK RYAN

    CHARACTER LIST

    EVAN HARRIS: M/30’S. LOYAL SECRET SERVICE AGENT WHO IS MOBILIZED TO TRACK DOWN PRESIDENT’S WOULD-BE ASSASSINS.

    PATRICK STEVENSON: M/50’S. EXPERIENCED CIA OPERATIVE WHO JOINS THE EFFORT TO APPREHEND THE WOULD-BE ASSASSINS.

    DAN EYAL (M/40S) -- SLICK MOSSAD AGENT WHO BECOMES ALLIES WITH PATRICK AND EVAN.

    RUFUS BARKER (M/50S) -- PRESIDENT OF THE UNITED STATES WHO FINDS HIMSELF UNDER ATTACK BY UNKNOWN ASSAILANTS.

    KATARINA BELINKOVA (F/20S) -- RUSSIAN TEMPTRESS AND STUNNER WHO MAY HAVE VALUABLE INTEL REGARDING THE PRESIDENT'S ATTACKERS.

    FRANK DABUSH (M/50S) -- FOREIGN-BORN FORMER ARMS DEALER WHO IS APPOINTED AS THE PRESIDENT'S CHIEF OF STAFF.

    Logline

    U.S. President Rufus Barker is thrown into the fire at his inauguration when an assassin takes out the First Lady and the Chief Justice. The FBI, CIA, and Mossad go into high gear to find out the motivation and intended target after another attempt takes down Air Force 1.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 35-54,18-34

    Target Gender: Male Leaning

    Setting

    Middle East, Washington DC

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: with a Publisher

    Publisher: Hildebrand Books an imprint of W. Brand Publishing

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    A failed assassination attempt on the President during the inauguration that kills the First Lady and Chief Justice. The President has to fix problems of the last term, mourn his wife, and find out who wants him dead.

    Ending Description

    With the FBI, CIA, and Mossad working together, a plan is devised to trap the head of the group responsible for the assassination attempts. A meeting held in the Oval Office reveals the leader to everyone's surprise.

    Group Specific

    military, mossad, politicians

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    978-1-950385-19-5

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy

    Main Character Details

    Name: Evan Harris

    Age: 36

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Badass,Masculine,Patriotic,Confident,Skillful,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Dan Eyal

    Age: 40s

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Modest,Charming,Sexy,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Skillful,Blunt,Engaging

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Katarina Belinkova

    Age: 30s

    Gender: Female

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Narcisstic,Complex,Sexy,Decisive,Secretive,Seductive,Educated,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Skillful

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Rufus Barker

    Age: 60s

    Gender: Male

    Role: emotional

    Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Modest,Faithful,Patriotic,Leader,Educated

    Genre

    ACTION, THRILLER, SUSPENSE, POLITICS

    Brief

    After an assassination attempt on the President goes awry, a loyal Secret Service Agent, a veteran CIA operative, and a slick Mossad agent are mobilized to bring the perpetrators to justice. A globe-trotting adventure sees the heroes track down a mysterious figure known only as "The Chameleon," while the President is attacked once again in the Middle East. The truth eventually comes out and the mastermind is exposed in a tense, fateful Oval Office meeting in front of the President's cabinet appointees.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    It is a fair reflection of the book, although it feels wrong that Dan, Patrick, and Evan are left out of the logline and short summary and that Patrick is left out of the development pitch.

    Draw of Story

    The high stakes-- This work starts out with a bang, constituting a memorable and consequential inciting incident. Where many works take time in excess to offer impact to audiences, this author takes full advantage of his opening pages.

    Possible Drawbacks

    There are a couple of things-- First, this work is challenging to a fault with how much it jumps around from different places and times in the first 50-60 pages. After the sure-handed opening, this functions to dizzy and complicate matters in excess. Perhaps there is a better way to lay out and introduce the many players without it feeling like a revolving door. For instance, wouldn't it be more suspenseful and efficient to meet Katarina in the ground in Moscow when Evan arrives? What are we really gaining from an early introduction when we have an opportunity to meet her organically as the story unfolds?

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is that this work is a high-stakes, globetrotting thriller that seems to be in vogue in the marketplace. Aside from its genre and popcorn frills, this work seems to play into the growing societal fear of our leaders being corrupt and power-hungry. The themes, therefore, may resonate on a wide scale.

    Fanbase Potential

    This work could perhaps have a large fanbase, if adapted. The fact that OLYMPUS HAS FALLEN has generated two sequels bodes well for this work's commerciality.

    Awards Potential

    No, this is far from an awards caliber story. Action and espionage films that rely on action and spectacle like this work does do not perform well in awards season.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    OLYMPUS HAS FALLEN, JACK RYAN

    What’s New About the Story

    Not much stands out as especially unique in this story, as it borrows many archetypes from genre entries past. However, what stands out as unique is the union between Secret Service, Mossad, and CIA. The heroes are clear-cut, hailing from very different backgrounds, and embodying varied and complementary skill sets. This stands out as an interesting element in the work at large.

    Lead Characters

    Evan stands out for his steadfastness and loyalty to the President-- qualities that govern his persona. He's an everyman and an in some ways by-the-books action movie hero, sure to be accessible to the audience at large.

    Uniqueness of Story

    While it certainly has a commercial appeal, this is not a rare gem, per se, as it seems to be encumbered a bit by its wordiness, its prioritization of plot over character, and its familiarity when A-B'd with similar genre entries.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Network, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    This is a work in progress as the work seems to commit to its plot and genre elements at some cost to its characters feeling human, original, and relatable. Moreover, this work is a bit wordy and complicated, and it would benefit from some condensation and simplification. Last, this work offers little that feels profoundly new and unexpected, especially when compared to similar projects from the past.

    Tips for Improvement

    Another pass to condense, cut, and simplify some of the excessively complicated elements would uplift this work. Also, finding opportunities to more thoughtfully dimensionalize the main characters would help. Considering how to more profoundly differentiate from other 'White House/President in peril' projects would benefit, too.

    Brief

    After an assassination attempt on the President fails, Secret Service agent Evan Harris is tasked with tracking the perpetrators down. Evan allies with the CIA's Patrick Stevenson and the cunning Mossad operative Dan Eyal. They go their separate ways on globe-trotting missions, hunting a shadowy mastermind figure known only as "The Chameleon."

    What We Liked

    This work stood out for its high stakes and its commercial appeal. Make no mistake-- This work is all about the action and spectacle, offering no shortage of popcorn cinema moments that will surely satisfy fans of the likes of Olympus has Fallen.

    Film: This could work well as a film adaptation as its concept has seemingly been proven already-- The fact that Olympus has Fallen has blossomed into a series with two sequels bodes well for this work. It has no shortage of action and spectacle that will surely draw the attention of fans of the genre.

    TV: This could work well as a TV adaptation as it seems to offer a viable foundation for expansion. Many of the characters in this would benefit from the time and consideration afforded by long form. Moreover, this work has no shortage of impact and action to sustain episodes of TV.

    Key points:
    1. The uncommonly high stakes.
    2. The many diverse, often scenic locations.
    3. The abundance of action and impact.
    4. The unforgettable and impactful inciting incident.
    5. The trio of diverse, intelligent, and complementary heroes.

    Synopsis

    As President-elect RUFUS BARKER is being sworn in, gunshots ring out on Capitol Hill, killing both the First Lady and a Supreme Court Justice. Barker is ushered away by loyal secret service agent EVAN HARRIS, 30s, as chaos breaks loose. 18 months earlier, Mossad agent DAN EYAL, 40s, brushes shoulders with medics on the ground in Israel, witnessing a child and his family get injured by errant shrapnel. He agrees to help the child's parents JAMILA and FAROUK get resituated. 3 months before the Inauguration, we meet KATARINA BELINKOVA, 3os, a sexy Russian bombshell working in the American Embassy in Moscow. She meets regularly with a mysterious Russian man, DIMA, on the bus. A week after the assassination attempt in DC, we meet the unassuming Iranian man HASSAN ABU SHIKRI, 20s, a guard at the Smithsonian, hiding out in a safehouse rented by the Iranian Revolutionary Guards. We learn that two weeks before the Inauguration, masked men gained kompromat on Hassan by photographing him next to a woman they murdered. Thus, Hassan is forced to give them access to the Smithsonian's rooftop.

    10 days after the attempt, we link up again with the president as he fills his cabinet, including MARCUS BARBOUR as CIA Director and FRANK DABUSH, a foreign-born former arms dealer, as Chief of Staff. At the CIA headquarters, Marcus puts counter-terrorism agent PATRICK STEVENSON, 50s, on the task of identifying the assassins. He links up with Dan Eyal and Evan Harris, who the President has released from his personal security to partner with Patrick. The men quickly deduce that Hassan, who has gone missing, was involved with the shooting. Evan works to track him down, while Patrick, Dan, and Marcus uncover a communication between Hassan and a figure known as "The Chameleon." Evan asks about Hassan at an Iranian religious building, and he is knocked off his feet by a massive car explosion when he leaves. Hassan manages to get a hold of a gun, and he kills his captors, while Evan is assigned a mission to Moscow, where he is to confront and perhaps kill Katarina, who is suspected of being a mole. Evan, Dan, and Patrick debate on Hassan's role and whether he was a cover for the true assassins. Evan recounts a destructive drone strike on a school, which might have spurred covert, retaliatory action from Iran.

    Hassan's three victims are discovered, and Patrick helps interrogate the landlord of the safe house apartment that was rented under Hassan's name, trying to get a sense of where Hassan might be. On the ground in Russia, Evan confronts Katarina in her apartment. She tries to seduce him, but he knows she only fancies women. Evan drills Katarina on her communications with Russian intelligence, and Katarina convinces him that she is a double agent, working hand-in-hand with Marcus and the CIA. Soon, Katarina earns Evan's uneasy trust, telling him that her contact Dima likely knows who The Chameleon is. Just as they prepare to visit Dima, they cower from a barrage of bullets from the street. In D.C., Patrick visits the morgue to see the bodies of the three men slain by Hassan, and he espouses that they are Muslim Chechnyans. Meanwhile, President Rufus takes flight in Air Force One, but he and his entourage quickly find themselves targeted by missiles while over the Middle East. Air Force fighters come in to ward off the missiles, but the President's plane is eventually hit. The plane crash lands in the desert, killing several and leaving the POTUS in critical condition. All the while, Hassan has been hiding out in motels around D.C., careful to evade the road blocks and heightened police presence. Back in Moscow, Katarina and Evan evade what are revealed to be Russian contract killers, taking refuge in the U.S. embassy.

    Thanks to Mossad operative Ben, Patrick works to mobilize a pair of refugees--Jamila and Farouk, who we met earlier--into the Muslim community in D.C., with hopes of gaining insight into Hassan and co. Meanwhile, while a physician tends to POTUS, Air Force One is surrounded and attacked by Jihadist militants. Thanks to a dedicated troop of Marines and diligent Air Force coverage, the Americans ward off the first wave of attack. Vice President Tom assumes the presidency under the 25th amendment, and the situation room operates to protect POTUS. Hassan heads to a Muslim cultural center using a fake name, but the IMAM recognizes him. The Imam is wary of Hassan, given what he is being accused of, but he invites him to stay with a new refugee family that just so happens to be Jamila and Farouk. With no other options, Hassan accepts. In the desert, after continued battle, a rescue operation is executed for the President and co. Meanwhile, thanks to Jamila and Farouk, the CIA locates Hassan, and they recover him after a tense hostage situation at the mosque.

    Patrick follows clues gathered from the discarded assassination attempt rifle down to Colombia, tracing the path of the gun. He connects with an arms dealer and horse breeder, who tells of an unidentified gentleman who picked up the gun. Patrick waits while the source tries to figure out who the buyer was. At the embassy in Moscow, Evan and Katarina try to deduce who might have wanted them killed. Evan presses her on her allegiances-- Evidently, she has been working at the behest of the head of command of the CIA, yet Evan was mobilized to kill her if need be. Katarina tells of her contact Dima, who was apparently rubbing shoulders with the group that headed the assassination attempt-- The Chameleons. In the middle of the night, an attempt to rendezvous with Dima goes awry, and he is killed by a gunshot wound.

    Evan and Katarina are smuggled out of Moscow and taken to London, where they are greeted by Dan and Patrick. On the plane back to the States, the group compares notes and findings, ruling out the theory of Jihadists trying to kill the POTUS. Soon, it becomes clear that the group has consensus on the suspected perpetrator and leader of the Chameleons. A meeting in the Oval Office ensues, headed by the POTUS himself. He calls in his cabinet to join Dan, Patrick, and Evan, and he outlines the theory of the motivation behind the assassination attempts. All signs point to Chief of Staff Frank Dabush--the foreign-born former arms dealer--whose only path to President would be with the President and Vice President dying, given that he was born outside of the United States. Frank, in the heat of the moment, seizes Evan's gun and uses Evan as a human shield, desperate to make an escape via helicopter. He shoots Patrick in the hip and trains the gun on the President while negotiating his escape. However, the lights go out, and Frank is quickly disarmed and apprehended by Dan. He's taken away by police while the others exhale and recover.

    About The Author

    Willie Hirsh's other works include Regicide, The Shadow King (2018), and Constellation: The Second Race to Space has Begun (2018), which was American Book Fest Finalist in 2018. When he is not writing spy and suspense novels, Willie enjoys traveling, photographing nature, and painting landscapes in oil. He pursued a career in engineering and currently works full-time managing a construction firm.