She is Me
GENRE
ADVENTURE LGBT EROTIC EPIC FUNNY FANTASY ROMANCE MELODRAMA SATIRE
Core Theme
FREE LOVE
TIME PERIOD
20th Century (multiple decades)
COMPARABLE TITLES
50 SHADES OF GREY
CHARACTER LIST
HUSBAND (40S) - RICH, MARRIED, AND OPEN MINDED
KAT (30S) WIFE - INTUITIVE AND BEAUTIFUL
MONA (20S) GIRLFRIEND - JEALOUS AND SEXY
KAMI (30S) - WAITRESS & HOT
HENRY (40S) BUTLER & GAY
DARIAN (30S) HAIRDRESSER & GAY
Logline
This story is about presenting different angles of life that so that we can all learn what unconditional love is & feels like. Everyone will judge. This book acts as a reflection for the reader. A true gift to the beholder. Teaches you how to become aligned with Source after reflecting if allowed.
Target Audiences
Age: 18-34,35-54,55+
Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning,Male Leaning,LGBT Leaning
Setting
Starts in Colorado and ends in Puerto Rico
Based on a True Story
No
Publishing Details
Status: Yes: self-published
Publisher: Wick'D Beast Entertainment
Year Published: 2017
Starting Description
Contrasting. Captivating is what our readers have said. Meant to draw you in & start to shift your mind. The external verbiage set's the stage for the gift that is the reflections & emotions of the book. Makes you wonder how the two go together. If you judge, you'll miss the gift. If not, you expand
Ending Description
In short the end reflects that we should strive to hold onto the positive vibrations and carry them forward into everything that we do next. It reflects a lot of happiness & conviviality and fun. It also reiterates that we should all have fun on this journey while accepting everyone for who they are
Group Specific
Information not completed
Hard Copy Available
Yes
ISBN
13:978-0-9995683-2-3
Mature Audience Themes
Language/Profanity,Nudity,Sexual Abuse
Plot - Other Elements
Twist,Philosophical Questions,Happy Ending,Coming of Age,Meaningful Message
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Voyage and Return,Rebellion Against 'The One'
Main Character Details
Name: Mr. Bordeaux
Age: Mid thirties, late forties
Gender: Other
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Charming,Confident,Complex,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Greedy,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Sexy,Selfless,Romantic,Visionary,Seductive,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf,Badass,Aspiring,Adventurous,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: Kat
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Romantic,Visionary,Skillful,Selfless,Blunt,Sexy,Modest
Additional Character Details
Name: Mona
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Role: tempter
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Badass,Charming,Clumsy,Crazy,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Greedy,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Naive,Villainous,Obedient,Sexy,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Romantic,Seductive,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Insecure,Gracious,Complex,Sophisticated,Selfless
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Genre
ROMANCE, LGBT
Brief
Three lovers embark on a journey full of sensuality, temptations, and experiences.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
I think the profile could be highly improved. The author uses sections of the page, such as the summary, to narrate personal impressions on the story, when he could briefly explain what the narrative is about, facilitating the understanding for those coming into contact with the material for the first time.
Draw of Story
It didn't really catch my attention, but starting the book in an intense sex scene is somewhat brave.
Possible Drawbacks
The book lacks conflict. Solid and impactful conflicts. Those that appear in the course of history are not enough to maintain attention.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook would be the wish to love freely, to try things, without judgment, only guided by love. But with the absence of a better-defined goal and more powerful conflicts, this initial wish loses its reason for existing.
Fanbase Potential
No. Only if the author vastly improves the story. As it stands, it looks more like a sequence of eroticism. And, I believe the story lacks narrative power to attract a large fanbase.
Awards Potential
If the story could raise a profound reflection on free love, unconventional romances, freeing yourself to mundane pleasures, might be more likely to earn awards. The book needs strength to become more relevant.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
FIFTY SHADES OF GREY: AN ENIGMATIC MILLIONAIRE ENJOYS EXPERIENCING ALL KINDS OF SEXUAL PLEASURE. 365 DAYS (DNI) - A WOMAN IS IMPRISONED BY A MAFIA MAN AND ATTRACTED BY HIM, STARTS TO FALL IN LOVE
What’s New About the Story
The harmonious triple relationship could be a point that makes the story less cliché.
Lead Characters
The characters need to be much better developed. Little is known about the three main characters, other than their taste for pleasure. It ends up negatively affecting the story.
Uniqueness of Story
No. It has possible ways to grow: fully assume the sexual aspect of the story, thus generating some reflections on this free love, OR expand conflicts and develop a narrative that would better serve an erotic drama that would exist beyond the sexual scenes.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
First, we need to understand the reason for the existence of this story. Does the author want to present the day-to-day life of a triple relationship? Or does he want to reduce society's judgment about this kind of relationship by showing three people who love each other? It's hard to understand what the story is about exactly. We follow three people who enjoy having sex together and have fun. However, aside from small and insignificant conflicts encountered along the way, the story looks like a sexual experience diary. We could know more about each character in this triple gear that, apparently, works harmoniously. It would be interesting to understand why these people joined this relationship and how they feel. The lack of conflict creates frustration because we are always on the verge that something will happen, but nothing happens. Other films have already shown that there is an audience for erotic stories, including adaptations, but in addition to intense scenes, these movies brought some reflection, stakes, and drama. These elements are missing here. We could better understand who these people are and how they feel in an unconventional relationship, even if it is not the film's focus. How is it to deal with society's daily judgment? Some sort of reflection the story should generate for us to be more remarkable.
Brief
When Kat, her husband, and their girlfriend go on vacation, they're judged by everyone who crosses their way; so all they do is enjoy and spread their love.
What We Liked
It's an easy, stress-free read with intense erotism and light-hearted romance.
Film: Set in a paradisiac location, this light-hearted romance mixes beautiful views, intense sex, and an aspiring lifestyle that can make a very appealing and easy-to-digest feature-length film. The characters are good-looking and sexy, and there's an appeal in their lack of drama.
TV: This feel-good story can be a great mature TV show targeted at a broad audience seeking vacation-type, erotic content. The open end can lead to more seasons, and the characters have space for long-term development.
Key points:
- Beautiful location;
- Erotica;
- LGBT positive;
-Stress-free story;
- Aspiring lifestyle;
Synopsis
Kat, Mona, the guy have amazing, seductive sex before heading to the shower and getting ready for the trip ahead. The car service arrives, and he takes care of the bags while the women wait by the car. The driver gives him a strange stare.
The trio arrives at the airport, and the VIP attendant can’t help but stare at the throuple, trying to understand the dynamic between the married couple and Mona. They head to the airplane and again are greeted with some confusion by the workers; a flight attendant believes Mona is their daughter. Mona tries to nap, and husband and wife share their thoughts on the hot flight attendant. Jealous, Mona masturbates Kat before they all fall asleep.
They arrive in Puerto Rico and eat at the VIP area; a waitress called Raquel accidentally spills butter on Kat and profusely apologizes, but Kat insists that she has nothing to worry about. When the husband introduces himself and Kat introduces Mona as their girlfriend, Raquel gets shy. The women exchange a few looks, and Mona gets a bit jealous. They head to the cruise ship and get settled; Mona and Kat shower together while the husband catches up on work. Later, they eat.
Their waitress, Kami, gets very flirty with the trio, especially after finding out their dynamic. They ask her to check on them later. They watch a burlesque performance show, and Kat is deeply touched. Their butler Henry announces his work might be done for the evening, as he realizes that Kat and Mona have started kissing.
They head back upstairs, where Kat and Mona kiss while the husband drinks scotch and smokes a cigar. Not too long after, Kami joins them, and the three women shower and foreplay. They leave the shower, and Kat puts a leash on both women, leading them to the husband. They kiss his body until he climaxes.
They wake up, and the husband presents them with the itinerary. Impressed that the day adventure includes swimming, they ask about their hair—but the husband surprises them with the arrival of their hairdresser, Darian. The husband gets a call, and Kat tells him to cancel an important deal based on a dream she had. He calls the deal off. The women have their hairs down and look amazing. Darian asks, and Kat tells him they are doing great with Mona. They head to the jet skies and have an afternoon of fun before the boat arrives.
The husband and Henry leave to run errands, and Natalia replaces Henry in taking care of the women. The women go through an amazing and sexy spa experience; mid-way through, Mona and Kat start to kiss and soon have sex. Kat notices Natalia watching them and includes her in the sex. The husband arrives with a frustrated Henry and un upset Darian, who hated the boat ride. They arrive and find the women relaxed and happy, but all covered in chocolate from the spa. Frustrated, Darian walks to his room.
The next day a storm turns their cruise into a scary, bumpy ride. Kat is nervous, and she and her husband have intense sex; Mona shows up after it, and the husband fears she was watching. Then, he goes to the balcony to meditate but is interrupted by Henry, who asks for his advice in loving multiple people at the same time.
The husband returns to their room, where he has exciting sex with Kat, Mona, and Kami. Again, he notices Mona watching with jealousy. Later, they have sex again to enjoy their last night at the ship. Then, they go to dinner and invite Darian and Henry to join them.
The next morning, they all have a hangover, but Henry gives them a quick remedy suggested by Kat the night before that cures them. They enjoy breakfast, and the husband surprises them with an extension to their vacation: the next stop, Hawaii.