COMEDY, DRAMA

Wendell has to power to be forgotten which gets him a lot of free things in life but also makes him quite lonely. Immune to getting noticed, he is surprised when a woman who loves books suddenly acknowledges him. Esme, the book lover, helps Wendell care for his dying plant, a finicky ficus. The two form a lasting friendship even though they kill the plant.

FAIR

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Indeed the book profile reflects the story although it would be beneficial to add a development pitch as it would help explain the theme of the story and why the narrative is marketable.

The idea that Wendell's superpower is to be forgettable is compelling especially when someone notices him for some reason. It creates a curiosity about Esme and why she is different compared to the rest of the world to be able to notice Wendell. Then there is interest in both characters as to why Esme can notice Wendell and why no one else can notice Wendell.

The main conflict is quite simplified and the focus becomes on Wendell's origin story which adds depth, but undermines the stakes and transformations of the characters internal conflicts. Increasing the stakes of their friendship and or the ficus as well as showing a trackable transformation of the internal conflicts would help increase tension and emotional investment.

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that someone notices a superhero whose power is to be forget-able.

Depending on the trajectory of the characters' relationship and further internal transformation this might do well in independent cinema although would likely not be a commercial mainstream blockbuster due to its eccentricity.

This is unlikely to have awards potential as the drama is low-stakes and the characters' internal conflicts and journey are not as apparent.

LOW BUDGET

THE LOBSTER, HER, SWISS ARMY MAN, LARS AND THE REAL GIRL, ADAPTATION

The originality stems from the dynamic between the two main characters and by focusing on the progression of their relationship rather than a majority of their dialogue explaining their past, there could be greater tension to their conflict and character development.

Esme is inquisitive, caring and flashy when she wants. Wendell is consistent, lonely, and helpful plus somewhat glum.

This is certainly a memorable and quirky concept but the characters and themes could benefit from adjustment to become more apparent in their transformation.

Film: Indie, Streaming TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Upgrading the pacing on the low-stakes conflict may help create more consistent tension. Allowing the characters to show their transformation of an internal conflict through changing their actions to overcome a flaw would help increase the emotional investment in the characters as they complete their goal.