DRAMA

Chris is a guy who has a normal life. He studies, dates, has fun with friends. Suddenly, he is diagnosed with Multiple sclerosis and, despite dealing well with the disease initially, his married life becomes affected over the years due to what he calls a "poor me" attitude.

FAIR

FIRST PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

It does, but the author could include more characters in his profile. And also, Chris is the protagonist of the story, not the logical, because the whole narrative revolves around him.

The narrative starts when Chris begins to feel his first symptoms, still in college. It's an impactful and moving description of a disease that doesn't choose an age to emerge. We understand his fears right away.

The sections where the author advises readers on what not to do in their love lives are the ones that could be dropped if adapted. It's interesting to see him living the problem, dealing with it, making mistakes, and finding a better way to live. It is an indirect and more appealing way of raising a reflection in the reader/audience.

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is how a person manages to deal with a degenerative disease and the fears and anxieties that it generates.

The story certainly has enough dramatic weight to attract fans of the drama genre.

Yes. If the movie or series digs deeper into the fears, challenges, victories, struggles, and lifestyle of a person with MS, as a portrait, it would have chances to earn awards.

MEDIUM BUDGET

THE THEORY OF EVERYTHING: A PROMISING AND BRILLIANT ASTROPHYSICIST WHO ENDS UP LOSING MOBILITY AND SPEECH AND HAS TO DEAL WITH NEW LIMITATIONS WITHOUT LOSING HIS WILL TO REMAIN ACTIVE. THE DIVING BELL AND BUTTERFLY: AN EDITOR IN CHIEF OF ELLE MAGAZINE SUFFERS A STROKE AND HAS HIS WHOLE BODY PARALYZED, COMMUNICATING ONLY USING HIS LEFT EYE. HE OVERCOMES HIS DIFFICULTIES AND WRITES A BOOK.

The focus on marriage is the most original in this story. We usually see how people with MS, or similar, deal with life, career, and the love element stays in the background. Here, the love life shaken by Chris' more rigid posture is the central focus.

Chris is a good protagonist, as he is active and experiences a lot of transformations throughout history. The only concern would be to make a good balance between Cris' moments of anger with his wife and moments of sweetness and insecurity so that the audience could understand him and be on his side. Protagonists with a "dark" side are fascinating, but the audience still needs to want to root for them. He's a likable guy to start with, but his constant fights with his wife, if excessive, can make him a little less likable.

It's not a rare gem because we've seen similar movies before, and also because the structure needs further development to reach a higher narrative level.

Film: Indie, Streaming TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series, Unscripted

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

The frank portrait of what life is like for a person with multiple sclerosis is in itself worthy of attention and exciting material for the audiovisual. Getting to know different realities in depth is one of the biggest facets of cinema, and this story has great potential for that. However, as an audiovisual work, the narrative would need adjustments. The structure is a little uneven. We accompany Chris' story and get into his narrative, following his daily life and daily challenges. Then suddenly, there is a cut in this narrative so the author can express his opinions about his past and how he treated his marriage and faced life. In a book, these fragments even work, but it would be interesting to keep a straight fictionalized narrative for the audiovisual so as not to pause the audience's growing emotions. The characters could be a little more refined. As a memory, Chris is quite developed, but the others end up becoming too flat in comparison, which can end up affecting interactions, dialogues, and subplots. It would be interesting to have this work of further development of all the secondary characters so that they are minimally equivalent to the protagonist's complexity. It's an interesting report. It would only be necessary to transform this material into a more fictional structure for the audiovisual.