Second Born

Patrick W. Andersen

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GENRE

DRAMA HISTORICAL FICTION POLITICAL RELIGIOUS WAR EPIC

    Core Theme

    FAITH IN GOD

    TIME PERIOD

    Across The Centuries

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    JESUS OF NAZARETH, SON OF GOD, KILLING JESUS, SILENCE

    CHARACTER LIST

    • JESUS/JOSHUA: LEAD, IRREVERENT, CHARISMATIC, OUTSPOKEN

    • JAMES/JACOB: PIOUS, AUTHORITATIVE, JESUS’ OLDER BROTHER

    • JUDAS/THOMAS: STUTTERS, MILD MANNERED, GOOD WITH NUMBERS, JESUS’ YOUNGER BROTHER

    • SIMON: STARTS OUT MEEK, BUT BECOMES A STRONG LEADER, DECISIVE, RESPONSIBLE, JESUS’ YOUNGEST BROTHER

    • MIRIAM: STRONG, COMMANDING, MOTHER OF JESUS

    • JOSEPH: SUCCESSFUL, LOVING, PROUD, FATHER OF JESUS

    Logline

    Joseph has a vision for his family and nation. And as a successful trader and merchant, he might just have amassed a large enough fortune to bring it to reality. Though he has built his home in Sepphoris, the most beautiful city in Galilee, all his hopes rest on his first-born son James, who is studying for the priesthood at the Temple far south in Roman-occupied Jerusalem. Important people say James may grow up to be the Righteous One, who would restore Israel to God’s favor. Joseph has charged his other children to devote all their energy to support James in the family’s quest. Second-born Jesus, however, is a troublemaker. Third son Judas, who looks so much like Jesus that he is nicknamed Thomas (the Twin), stutters terribly and follows meekly in Jesus’ shadow. Fourth son Simon has trouble learning to read, and suffers bullying at the hands of rough boys who work in the fields. Their sisters Joanna and Susanna seem built in the mold of their mother Miriam, who is the dominant force that maintains discipline in the family. Second Born follows the individual developments of the four brothers leading up to the fateful events in Jerusalem, when the Romans seek to stamp out Judeans' growing sense of nationalism.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 35-54

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Judea and Galilee, under Roman occupation

    Based on a True Story

    Yes

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: with a Publisher

    Publisher: Page Publishing

    Year Published: 2017

    Starting Description

    Though James comes from a wealthy family, the peasants of Jerusalem come to hail him as the Righteous One. His younger brother Jesus, meanwhile, has become a hero to the countryside's downtrodden farmers, who dare to consider him their king.

    Ending Description

    The Romans seek to arrest leaders of the religious, military and economic uprisings. Jesus accepts the mantle of all three, allowing his brothers to escape.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Meaningful Message, Philosophical Questions

    Plot - Premise

    Internal Journey/Rebirth

    Main Character Details

    Name: Jesus

    Age: 33

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Outspoken, Strong Moral Code, Visionary, Decisive, Empathetic, Honorable, Masculine, Leader, Religious, Aspiring, Engaging, Heroic, Sarcastic, Faithful, Confident, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Funny, Adventurous, Badass, Complex

    Additional Character Details

    Name: James starts out snobbish and arrogant but grows to become revered as the Righteous One.

    Age: 35

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Confident, Educated, Gracious, Obedient, Sophisticated, Strong Moral Code, Aspiring, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Honorable, Religious

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Judas

    Age: 32

    Gender: Male

    Role: Sidekick

    Key Traits: Honorable, Insecure, Modest, Secretive, Underdog, Clumsy, Complex, Educated

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Simon

    Age: 28

    Gender: Male

    Role: Emotional

    Key Traits: Insecure, Leader, Faithful

    Genre

    ACTION, RELIGION, DRAMA, WAR, POLITICS

    Brief

    Jesus comes from a wealthy family with several brothers and sisters. He and his brothers are influential in shaping the religious and economic perspective of their community. The book is an alternate portrayal of a traditional story.

    Overall Rating

    GOOD

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: GOOD

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: GOOD

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The book profile is an accurate reflection.

    Draw of Story

    Frankly, it was hard to get into the book at the beginning. The structure of smaller vignettes featuring many different characters is often chaotic and can be confusing. It takes until at least the middle of the book to really get a good handle on the plot and the characters.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The rapid jumping from one character to the next in small chapters without always having a through line connection was often hard to follow. It was was difficult to engage deeply with the material for a good portion of the book.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The alternate portrayal of familiar and historical characters was interesting and well-researched.

    Fanbase Potential

    The niche subject and cerebral presentation may be elusive to a large part of the movie going public.

    Awards Potential

    It would most likely not be an awards contender given the liberties taken with historical figures. However, the epic nature of a film based on this type of sweeping subject matter may elevate it to that category.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    JESUS OF NAZARETH, SON OF GOD, KILLING JESUS, SILENCE

    What’s New About the Story

    It is very original and sufficiently unique since it presents an independent and alternate version of one of the most widely known stories in the world.

    Lead Characters

    The characterization of Jesus as coming from a wealthy family full of many siblings and being considered a trouble maker or a jokester makes this particular incarnation of the character stand out.

    Uniqueness of Story

    The structure of the story is unwieldy which makes it hard for an audience to become engaged quickly. Integrating the chapters into a tighter plot with less set up could be an immense improvement .

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    The story is an interesting take on a popular story, but the large number of characters on their own separate paths takes awhile to gel. At a little past the halfway point, things start to come together well.

    Tips for Improvement

    Again, the alternative nature of the popular story is compelling, but it needs to be more cohesive to hold the interest of an audience. The chapters need less set up and more through-line connection to one another from an earlier point in the book would tie the work together in a more concise and digestible manner.

    Brief

    In ancient Galilee, a group of brothers from a wealthy and distinguished family greatly influence the economic and spiritual interests of their community.

    What We Liked

    - The alternate take on the popular story of Jesus of Nazareth is refreshing and thought-provoking even if it clashes with personal viewpoints. The book is incredibly well researched making for a realistic backdrop for some of the most famous or even infamous figures in religious history.
    - A feature adaptation of the story would provide vast and cinematic potential. The monumental nature of the story and characters would be an easy transition to film.
    - Adapting the book into a limited television series would be an easy transition. The structure lends itself to the episodic format that builds to the inevitable conclusion.
    - Key points: Based on historical figures; Unique ; Large in scale; Well-researched; Cinematic

    Synopsis

    In ancient Galilee, a successful and influential merchant named Joseph has a big family. The expectations he has for his family and their role in elevating the people of Israel is ambitious. Joseph’s success is mirrored in his wife, Miriam’s, strength and authority. Together they try to raise their children to do great things. Joseph and Miriam’s eldest son is James (or Jacob in the ancient tongue). He lives in the city of Jerusalem that is occupied by the Romans. James is studying for the priesthood at the temple and he takes his mission quite seriously. It is prophesied by important people that he may one day be elevated to the status of the Righteous One who will bring Israel into God’s esteem. Joseph makes it clear that the rest of the family is to support James in his endeavor.

    The second son is Jesus (or Joshua as he would have been known). He has an irreverent personality, but possesses a sense of honor along with his over abundant charisma. The third son is Judas. He closely resembles Jesus and is sometimes called Thomas which means the twin. Since Judas is more meek and suffers from a stuttering speech impediment, he often finds himself living in the shadow of Jesus. The youngest son is Simon and he is mercilessly bullied by the local boys. The two daughters, Joanna and Susanna, are strong younger versions of Miriam and are very supportive of their brothers.

    While Jesus is out with Joseph in the market they come across a foreign traveling merchant. The man and Joseph are bargaining when his son, Ranjit, who is showing off, falls from a rock into the sea. He suffers a badly broken arm that will surely kill him if he is forced to travel with his father and not receive proper care and healing time. Knowing that Ranjit’s father must move on to maintain his livelihood and that Ranjit may die if forced to travel with him, Jesus offers to travel and work with him in Ranjit’s stead. In exchange Ranjit will go live in Joseph’s household while he is nursed back to health by Miriam and the sisters. Both fathers agree to the arrangement. While Jesus works and travels with Ranjit’s father over several months, he is exposed to many different types of people and beliefs. Meanwhile, Ranjit recovers well under the care of the women and he befriends Judas. Ranjit teaches Judas math and he becomes quite good in economic and business matters. As Judas matures, he loses his stutter, gains enough confidence to run the financial side of the family business. When it becomes clear that Jesus will not settle down in marriage, Judas fulfills the family obligation and is wed to a lovely young woman called Mary, who was a friend of the family as a child and once betrothed to Jesus.

    As a child Simon was always bullied by a group of local boys. Jesus comes to his rescue when Simon is alone up against several other boys at once. On a fateful day, Simon is cornered alone by Chuza, the biggest bully of them all. Simon decides to stand up to him and things turn around from him. Chuza is bullied by his own father. When Simon sees this, he chooses to cover for Chuza and they soon become good friends. As he grow into an adult, Simon asserts his affinity for strategy and with the help of Chuza, acts as guardian and defender of the family, the business and their workers.

    As James grows up in the temple, he continues to be influential in the religious faith of Israel. By ministering to beggars and outcasts he becomes known as The Righteous One. Meanwhile, Joseph has sent Jesus out to work in the vineyards in Nazareth. He doesn’t reveal his identity as Joseph’s son, but soon earns a reputation of his own. Jesus hears of a man who is baptizing people in the river Jordan. He is called the Prophet. When he goes to meet him, Jesus finds the man is his cousin, John. He asks to be baptized and John happily obliges. While being dipped in the water, Jesus has a great spiritual awakening. He hears the voice of God and finds that he can speak directly to him. This inspires him to preach to the devout and teach them how to pray to God. Jesus offers great comfort to his people and becomes known as their king across the land.

    The Romans are unhappy when they hear news of the Righteous One and Jesus of Nazareth being called King. They are interested in the rising popularity of these men, their brothers, and the Prophet as well. Herod Antipas also holds deep suspicions. There is always an undercurrent of unrest nearby and in the surrounding regions. When Joseph becomes ill, Simon has to help smuggle his older brothers home to bid their father a final farewell. After the death of Joseph, Judas and Simon become men of the house while James and Jesus are continue their work with the people. Judas uses his business acumen to hide money away to keep it from being taxed by Herod. He then reinvests it in the people. Ranjit, who has married one of Judas’ sisters, works with him. Simon and Chuza, who has married the other sister, protect Judas’ endeavor. Simon, now grown, takes a wife named Judith.

    As tensions mount, Herod finds John and has him beheaded. John’s murder signals that Jesus’ life is in grave danger as well. When the whole family travels to Jerusalem for Passover, they avoid their enemies along the way with help from Simon and his men. Once they arrive at the temple, James is recognized by the people as the Righteous One and Jesus as the King. There is no way for them to keep a low profile, and so they are in peril. As the enemies close in on the family, Jesus distracts them with a speech of faith. This distraction allows his brothers and the rest of the family to escape with their lives. For his sacrifice, Jesus is met with a violent death. When he is later resurrected, he shows himself to Mary, who is a true believer. She brings news of his return back to the mourning family.

    About The Author

    Patrick W. Andersen is a novelist living in San Francisco. He worked as an award-winning editor of a weekly newspaper for many years and has published short fiction in numerous journals.