Serpenteens-Nature's Forces

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ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA FAMILY YOUNG ADULT

2000s

Pol McShane

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Submision Type

book

Logline

Five teenage demigods, able to transform into various types of snakes, travel the country and use their abilities to control the weather.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Drama,Family,Young Adult

Short Summary

Kody Novak, 17, discovers he is a serpent demigod.

Setting

Florida/United States

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Coming of Age

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Kody Novak (changes into king cobra)

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Empathetic,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Heroic,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Heartthrob,Faithful

Additional Character Details

Name: Brodee (changes into boa constrictor)

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Charming,Complex,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Funny,Blunt,Sexy

Additional Character Details

Name: Lana (changes into a sea snake)

Age: 16

Gender: Lgbt

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Complex,Heroic,Blunt,Secretive,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Kurt (changes into a Western diamondback)

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Crazy,Engaging,Honorable,Funny,Outspoken,Adventurous

About The Author

Pol McShane was born in 1965 in Port Jefferson, New York. He is the author of over twenty books, and currently lives in Colorado with his husband and their two golden retrievers.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

global warming

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: self-published

Year Published: 2014

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

FANTASY

Brief

A group of teenage sibling demigods who have the power to become snakes and control the weather join forces in order to protect the planet.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, it does, even though it lacks a little further explanation in the short summary section.

Draw of Story

The idea of Earth protectors who are also demigods with the ability to transform into snakes is quite compelling. The problem is that the book takes a long time to reach that part of the narrative.

Possible Drawbacks

Some unimportant moments in the story go on for too long and end up diluting interest in the narrative.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The main hook is the creation of this universe of demigods and climatic problems, which in a way criticizes human action in nature while also developing an immersive and fantastic narrative.

Fanbase Potential

The story still needs many adaptations in order to work completely, but there is the potential to attract ardent fans of this narrative.

Awards Potential

As it is written, it is unlikely that a film adaptation would be eligible for Awards.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

HARRY POTTER - IN ADDITION TO THE ABILITY OF SOME CHARACTERS TO TURN INTO ANIMALS, THE MAIN SIMILARITY IS THE EXISTENCE OF THIS MAGICAL WORLD WITHIN THE SOCIETY WE KNOW PERCY JACKSON - THIS FRANCHISE ALSO INTRODUCES MYTHOLOGICAL CHARACTERS AND DEMIGODS IN A MODERN CONTEXT, INSIDE A PLOT MIXES FANTASY AND ADVENTURE.

What’s New About the Story

The premise, which includes demigod brothers who turn into snakes and manage to control the climate, is quite original. However, there are improbable elements and an excess of explanations, especially in the dialogues, which can undermine the narrative`s strongest points.

Lead Characters

He is brave, determined, and has a good heart, despite being somewhat immature and insecure.

Uniqueness of Story

It is not a rare gem, especially due to some aspects of the plot that are underdeveloped or even difficult to believe within the universe created by the author.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Cable, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

One of the first things that need to be changed is to remove the excess of expository dialogues. We know that it is important to refer to the fight against the destruction of nature by man, but some things can and should be left implicit for the public. Another issue is that the brothers' powers need to have a slightly more mystical and relevant aura to really sound thought-provoking to the audience. As it stands, they sometimes look just awkward and somewhat embarrassing. To better develop not only the protagonist but also those around him, and even the threat that surrounds all of them, would be a very effective way to raise the stakes and keep the viewer interested. Other than that, although clichés are not always bad, it is necessary to know how to dose them and bring a reasonable amount of creativity to the plot as a whole. Dialogues need to be less direct and explanatory and the actions can always sound more surprising than they are now. With some of these changes, which are not simple, within an extensive revision of the text, the narrative must have a better chance of becoming a successful film adaptation.