Serpenteens-Nature's Forces
Logline
Five teenage demigods, able to transform into various types of snakes, travel the country and use their abilities to control the weather.
Genre
Action,Adventure,Drama,Family,Young Adult
Short Summary
Kody Novak, 17, discovers he is a serpent demigod.
Kody and his siblings have battle storms.
Setting
Florida/United States
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest
Plot - Other Elements
Meaningful Message,Coming of Age
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Kody Novak (changes into king cobra)
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Empathetic,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Heroic,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Heartthrob,Faithful
Additional Character Details
Name: Brodee (changes into boa constrictor)
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Charming,Complex,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Funny,Blunt,Sexy
Additional Character Details
Name: Lana (changes into a sea snake)
Age: 16
Gender: Lgbt
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Complex,Heroic,Blunt,Secretive,Romantic
Additional Character Details
Name: Kurt (changes into a Western diamondback)
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Charming,Crazy,Engaging,Honorable,Funny,Outspoken,Adventurous
Development Pitch
Blizzards, hurricanes, tornadoes, floods, every year becoming more deadly. Every year global warming worsens. But how do you fight a hurricane? With five teenage demigods, that's how. The children of serpent god, Shesha. Each one has the ability to transform into a different type of snake, and when in snake form, they can control various aspects of weather. Alone, they were confused by the strange cards they were dealt, each one having to figure out what they were and why. But when Kody Novak sets out and finds his half-siblings, together they form Serpenteens and travel to various locations to help fight the increasingly dangerous storms. But they soon discover that global warming isn't their only obstacle. The earth goddess, Renenutet, and her own nest of serpent demigod teens, are causing the worst of the storms, in order to remove the humans that are destroying the planet.
Genre
FANTASY
Brief
A group of teenage sibling demigods who have the power to become snakes and control the weather join forces in order to protect the planet.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it does, even though it lacks a little further explanation in the short summary section.
Draw of Story
The idea of Earth protectors who are also demigods with the ability to transform into snakes is quite compelling. The problem is that the book takes a long time to reach that part of the narrative.
Possible Drawbacks
Some unimportant moments in the story go on for too long and end up diluting interest in the narrative.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The main hook is the creation of this universe of demigods and climatic problems, which in a way criticizes human action in nature while also developing an immersive and fantastic narrative.
Fanbase Potential
The story still needs many adaptations in order to work completely, but there is the potential to attract ardent fans of this narrative.
Awards Potential
As it is written, it is unlikely that a film adaptation would be eligible for Awards.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
HARRY POTTER - IN ADDITION TO THE ABILITY OF SOME CHARACTERS TO TURN INTO ANIMALS, THE MAIN SIMILARITY IS THE EXISTENCE OF THIS MAGICAL WORLD WITHIN THE SOCIETY WE KNOW PERCY JACKSON - THIS FRANCHISE ALSO INTRODUCES MYTHOLOGICAL CHARACTERS AND DEMIGODS IN A MODERN CONTEXT, INSIDE A PLOT MIXES FANTASY AND ADVENTURE.
What’s New About the Story
The premise, which includes demigod brothers who turn into snakes and manage to control the climate, is quite original. However, there are improbable elements and an excess of explanations, especially in the dialogues, which can undermine the narrative`s strongest points.
Lead Characters
He is brave, determined, and has a good heart, despite being somewhat immature and insecure.
Uniqueness of Story
It is not a rare gem, especially due to some aspects of the plot that are underdeveloped or even difficult to believe within the universe created by the author.
Possible Formats
Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Cable, Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
One of the first things that need to be changed is to remove the excess of expository dialogues. We know that it is important to refer to the fight against the destruction of nature by man, but some things can and should be left implicit for the public. Another issue is that the brothers' powers need to have a slightly more mystical and relevant aura to really sound thought-provoking to the audience. As it stands, they sometimes look just awkward and somewhat embarrassing. To better develop not only the protagonist but also those around him, and even the threat that surrounds all of them, would be a very effective way to raise the stakes and keep the viewer interested. Other than that, although clichés are not always bad, it is necessary to know how to dose them and bring a reasonable amount of creativity to the plot as a whole. Dialogues need to be less direct and explanatory and the actions can always sound more surprising than they are now. With some of these changes, which are not simple, within an extensive revision of the text, the narrative must have a better chance of becoming a successful film adaptation.