FANTASY, ROMANCE

A prince discovers a sad curse plaguing his family. All firstborns, upon becoming kings, will automatically turn into werewolves on full moon nights. He becomes king and tries to hide this sad secret, but everything ends up being discovered, and he is sent to the fire. Queen Milena, married to the dead King, will need to fight the fury of the people who felt betraied.

FAIR

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Margarida appears twice in a row in the characters section. King Maurício does indeed transform into a werewolf and go about killing innocent people, but it's not really his fault that this curse exists, so he doesn't fully function as an antagonist in the story. In addition, Margarida would act more as Milena's sidekick than actually having an emotional role.

The story begins at a party where we realize that the queen wants to get the king drunk to discover some secret and incriminate him. So, the story begins by giving us a feeling that she is betraying the King. This makes us curious to understand what is going on and why she is acting like this.

While it's interesting to see the Queen set up a trap against King Maurice right away in a type of flashforward, the unfolding that follows turns out to be rather uninteresting because, in fact, we already know what's going to happen at a crucial moment.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is to see this young, passionate, and happy man forced to live with a curse that may cause him to lose his wife and kingdom if discovered. The premise has good emotional appeal, and the hook is clear from the start.

Fans of fantasy and love stories set in castles can be drawn to the plot. It has the necessary elements for a construction that can attract this audience.

It is a more entertainment-oriented story than a deeper exploration of inner feelings and conflicts. If the story dives into this issue of a man stunned by a curse and who suffers day after day from having to hide who he really is, the story could gain more depth and greater chances of winning awards.

LARGE BUDGET

THE WOLFMAN: A MAN INVESTIGATES DEATHS ON A FULL MOON NIGHT AND DISCOVERS SECRETS ABOUT HIS OWN PAST. SILVER BULLET: A SERIES OF MURDERS HAPPEN IN A SMALL TOWN UNTIL THEY DISCOVER THAT THE PRIEST TURNS INTO A WEREWOLF AND KILLS PEOPLE.

It's a fantasy that looks like a fairy tale, with kingdoms, princesses, and princes, but which apparently takes place in Brazil and has a werewolf as the character who causes the greatest conflicts. It is somewhat original.

The characters could be a little more developed. Many reactions do not seem consistent with their personalities, such as the young Milena, who seems stunned by the discovery that she has fallen in love with a werewolf and suffers from it, but at the same time speaks of her husband with total hatred and disdain in the opening pages of the book. Or Maurício himself, who appears to be a good and dedicated man, and very much in love with Milena, but who suddenly shows himself utterly hostile to the people he loves and acts in a disconnected way from his personality.

It's not a rare gem because we've seen similar movies before and also because the narrative structure needs polishing.

Film: Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

King's dilemma could have been better explored. He finds out suddenly that he's going to turn into a murderous monster overnight and doesn't really seem to have a lot of feelings about it. He simply exists in the grotesque way he was thrown. As he is such a well-liked character at the beginning, it would be interesting to show him more frustrated and saddened by the facts so that we can understand his atrocities. Milena has a good chance of being an impactful character, but the way she presents herself, in the beginning, makes us distance from her and spend much of the story trying to find out if she is genuine or not. It gives a lot the impression that she is a fake who wants to steal the kingdom for her, when in fact, she is a passionate woman disgusted with the situation in which she finds herself. These are two narrative lines that can be worked together, but here they would need a deeper development. The dialogue is very on the nose. Everything is too much explained and described in words, while actions are just in the background. Actions are often more likely to present a character's sensations and conflicts, so it would be interesting to pay attention to creating more complete actions and more necessary dialogues, rather than simply putting in the characters' mouths what we can see in images. There are good narrative elements here for an original fantasy, but development is needed in terms of structure, dialogue, sequences, and characters.