Omniverse: Book I of the Omniverse Chronicles
ROMANCE SCI-FI SUSPENSE / THRILLER ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA FANTASY
1960s & '70s
Omniverse is the tale of Jack Thornton, who learns that he is a Hero, an undying servant of the Absolute, and who meets the woman of his dreams in a terrible nightmare.
Romance, Sci-Fi, Suspense / Thriller, Action, Adventure, Drama, Fantasy,
Jack Thornton is a former Marine lieutenant who learns that he is doomed to be a Hero, and undying servant of the absolute.
Jack saves Aiyanna from his archenemy, Heinrich Kuhl, but is badly wounded. Aiyanna vows to stay with him forever.
San Francisco, California
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending, Twist,The Hero''s Journey
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: John Michael "Jack" Thornton.
Key Traits: Badass, Charming, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Honorable, Lone Wolf, Masculine, Selfless, Confident, Faithful, Flexible, Funny, Heroic, Outspoken, Blunt, Educated, Engaging, Decisive, Perseverance, Strong Moral Code, Adventurous, Aggressive, Complex
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Beautiful, Confident, Faithful, Heartthrob, Badass, Empathetic, Leader, Romantic, Adventurous, Heroic, Seductive, Sexy, Selfless, Charming, Decisive, Engaging, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Honorable
Additional Character Details
Name: Sean Plunkett
Key Traits: Selfless, Strong Moral Code, Adventurous, Aggressive, Confident, Faithful, Lone Wolf, Secretive, Masculine, Skillful, Sophisticated, Badass, Charming, Complex, Engaging, Perseverance, Outspoken, Decisive, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Funny, Heroic, Honorable, Modest
Additional Character Details
Name: Travis Napoleon Tyler
Key Traits: Honorable, Leader, Sophisticated, Strong Moral Code, Charming, Confident, Heroic, Perseverance, Skillful, Aspiring, Complex, Masculine, Aggressive, Educated, Outspoken, Funny, Badass, Decisive, Engaging
ACTION, ROMANCE, THRILLER, FANTASY
Jack Thornton and Aiyanna adjust to life together coming from two different worlds. However they must do this while fighting the Absolute's slew of evil mythical creatures. Thornton and his crew are victorious in the end, but the new lovers' relationship suffers.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The Book Profile is for Omniverse Book 1 and while the file is labeled as such the actual pages are the second book in the series. Jack and Aiyanna are already together and the Absolute mythology has already been established so there are certain gaps in knowledge about the character's history together. By either adjusting the summary to be Book 2 and adding explanations about the first story to prepare for the second story or changing the file to be book one it will be easier to follow.
Draw of Story
Aiyanna is mystical and her actions are unpredictable without being able to be verbal. She is an interesting non-verbal character that is both very human at times and other times more like an alien. She is an intriguing character.
The characters tend to be cultural stereotypes which allows for quick personality assignments but doesn't leave a lot of room for uniqueness and three dimensional depth. Focusing on character development with internal conflicts along with the external conflicts will help add emotional investment and depth to the character fights. Thornton and Aiyanna have this dynamic within their relationship, but the other characters are missing their own objectives or emotional arcs.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that the creature antagonists borrowed from different mythologies are rare and possess fresh but mesmerizing visuals. The monsters are scary and like few have seen before.
This could have a medium size fanbase of those who enjoy supernatural action movies. There is a lot of mythology and cultures packed into the story and it might attract people who enjoy the diverse representation.
This is unlikely to have awards potential as most action films do not fare well in dramatic or comedic awards. Depending on the special effects of the monsters it might win for more behind the scenes awards.
Similar Films/TV Series
RESIDENT EVIL, RED SPARROW, ATLANTIS, CHRONICLES OF RIDDICK, THE LAST WITCH HUNTER, THE MUMMY, HEMLOCK GROVE
What’s New About the Story
Having Aiyanna be non-verbal but a main character is rare. Although it is centered around her having a language barrier, she shows she doesn't need English to communicate. Making her goal to be understood rather than to learn to be and speak like everyone else might make her more unique. It could even make her a role model for non-verbal audiences.
Jack Thornton is wise yet still fearless. Aiyanna is independent and fiercely protective.
Uniqueness of Story
It has a lot of cultural representation, but sticking solidly to one culture that is less represented could help strengthen the respect, connection and awareness towards the culture and its unique mythology.
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Focusing on one culture for the mythology such as Wendigo's Cree origins or Modoc or Japanese etc. would feel more honorable towards the use of someone else's culture. The cultural stereotypes could be reduced in order to provide room for uniqueness and depth to the side characters. The women especially are often reduced to both stereotypes and physical appearance descriptions so adding more traits and agency to them would help make them more well-rounded.